yellow_puff

eh no big deal we all have those

......is this guy american???????....only they would have a brain like this

it is a nice start.... very nice i like the first reactions of the mc heheheheh

hehehehhehehehehhehehehheheh....let us now enyoj your suffering

i feel betrayed.... where is the truck-kun?????????

i thought for a moment i ....am reading smt else cousei went back and checked if it was BL again hahahahahha

humm??? i forgot whats this novel is about, anyway that's my opinion. Why are you so hot about it????

... Teemo????

well.....if u wanna develop i probably think you need an editor , just the flow of your story telling has many holes.... i mean you probably know what alll this is about but we readers cant get into your head

okey ...like this is very bad... it feels like every third paragraph is missing with some information the story is developing very fast, again smt to do with the missing info