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bytter_sirup
bytter_sirupLv41yr
2023-06-08 18:25

why do cool ff concepts often tend to flop due to horrible execution? My main issue is with the MC. The guy rips his byakugon eyes out due to not wanting to be controlled by the hyuga. What if he didn't receive a system? what then? he'd be blind in a ninja village he knows will be attacked almost destroyed multiple times in the span of a few years. why not let the system come to him first and require him to blind himself to gain access to it? Cool concept, wasted potential.

Naruto: Blind Hyuga

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malinizgeldii
malinizgeldiiLv1

Seriously, would you allow a seal to be struck that can kill you at any time? It is so normal for uchia eyes to change hands that they can implant a normal human eye with an organ transplant. because people can even take an eye with their hands and attach it to themselves. I don't understand why they didn't do it to mc.

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Jakob_Timm
Jakob_TimmLv1

Maybe as punishment because he destroyed his eyes himself. For the clan he destroyed his worth as a ninja they couldnt control him longer. If it would be possible more ninja would change to normal eyes to live free from the seal.

malinizgeldii:Seriously, would you allow a seal to be struck that can kill you at any time? It is so normal for uchia eyes to change hands that they can implant a normal human eye with an organ transplant. because people can even take an eye with their hands and attach it to themselves. I don't understand why they didn't do it to mc.
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malinizgeldii
malinizgeldiiLv1

not if it were possible. because the original author didn't think of it. or because he couldn't think. The higher your level as a ninja in hyuga eyes, the less useful it becomes. cannot be compared to a uxhia eye. that is, during the Christmas, people may not even see their eyes themselves with normal eyes. but if the bird cage is applied, it means death when the eyes come out. and slavery. The original author didn't think of that. but also this ff author didn't think about it either. He plans to make a special eye for mc with 10 uchia eyes and 10 hyugiya eyes. which is so ridiculous.

Jakob_Timm:Maybe as punishment because he destroyed his eyes himself. For the clan he destroyed his worth as a ninja they couldnt control him longer. If it would be possible more ninja would change to normal eyes to live free from the seal.
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FluxleX
FluxleXLv4

bruh i would rather be a slave to someone so i can live and use my advantage to grow stronger rather than go on the way to the so called freedom where i will lose my sole huge advantages (on the condition i did not know about system) byakugan, what do you think will happen to mc after he became blind without his system, i can bet my on life that he would be dead either by starvation or some random rouge ninja, who will give mission to a blind hyuga ( like dude BLIND HYUGA lol) people would rather just call them civilian ninja so. nahh

malinizgeldii:Seriously, would you allow a seal to be struck that can kill you at any time? It is so normal for uchia eyes to change hands that they can implant a normal human eye with an organ transplant. because people can even take an eye with their hands and attach it to themselves. I don't understand why they didn't do it to mc.
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malinizgeldii
malinizgeldiiLv1

byukugan is just as useful a kekke gengai as jonin. He almost can't outdo anyone else in jonin and above. maybe it applies to other power but not byukugan.

FluxleX:bruh i would rather be a slave to someone so i can live and use my advantage to grow stronger rather than go on the way to the so called freedom where i will lose my sole huge advantages (on the condition i did not know about system) byakugan, what do you think will happen to mc after he became blind without his system, i can bet my on life that he would be dead either by starvation or some random rouge ninja, who will give mission to a blind hyuga ( like dude BLIND HYUGA lol) people would rather just call them civilian ninja so. nahh
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Mr_mysterio
Mr_mysterioLv3

you just have to become a seal master and destroy the one you have

malinizgeldii:Seriously, would you allow a seal to be struck that can kill you at any time? It is so normal for uchia eyes to change hands that they can implant a normal human eye with an organ transplant. because people can even take an eye with their hands and attach it to themselves. I don't understand why they didn't do it to mc.
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malinizgeldii
malinizgeldiiLv1

I totally agree with this. You need to find out secretly because Hyuga will be watching. Besides, he'll have to learn it from someone or he won't learn it fast enough. The system is not something that will support this. Also, I think I left this novel around the 30th chapter, there is no need to discuss it anymore.

Mr_mysterio:you just have to become a seal master and destroy the one you have
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TeraBaapHuMai
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Deleted my 5 star review which was at 5-6 chapter, idk. But the premise of the story is one of the best, heck this has the best hyuuga idea out of all ff i have read. But the execution, oh my god, it's so bad, so many plot holes. He should add more tags like, brainless mc, overpowered mc, forced plot, etc. So people like me can escape it. But 5/5 stars for stability of updates

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DaoistPCowBD
DaoistPCowBDLv4

Blind character in naruto is an interesting idea but author collected all cliches from chinese MS stories and dumped it right from the start. MC feels like cardboard(and of course everyone wiil praise him as an geniues, exept his chinese style enemies )

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madtitan
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I trust this author but for gods sake pleasee focus on 1 story at a time. You havent even completed your other 2😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭

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DaoistH7599X
DaoistH7599XLv4

A big fat nonsense, descriptions, plot, MC, all of it.

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AllSeeingBedroom
AllSeeingBedroomLv4

Forced plot but still a fun read if you turn off your brain as the author lacks some basic knowledge of the Naruto series so you may need to just say F it and accept what's happening.

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Lucien7
Lucien7Lv12

This work was pretty cool until chapter 15, from then on I felt a headache just looking at it. The protagonist does unnecessary things and as if he wants people not to like him worst of all and the system asking him to get 10 pairs of sharingan in the uchiha massacre and he just entered the academy... Even so he goes out killing a root ninja like if it was nothing.

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Jeremy_Stone_1106
Jeremy_Stone_1106Lv1

The author is destroying his own novel by this forced ino romance non sense. This is why the rating is significantly dropped. It's not too late to fix this problems.

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Jeremy_Stone_1106
Jeremy_Stone_1106Lv1

The romance is really forced, it became very cringe I mean ino? Please🤣 ..... This is why the ratings dropped,, I think you should consider love interest......

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Guionista
GuionistaLv1

It's such a pity that from being one of the top best Naruto stories, it turned into just another mediocre one. It had so much potential, the main character could have developed really well, but there was too much drama, nerfing, fillers, inconsistencies, and other issues. This story was the best in my opinion, with a new and interesting theme. But as the saying goes, 'the higher they rise, the harder they fall.' Unfortunately, this story fell and couldn't rise again. I wish everyone good luck. Goodbye, and until we meet again.

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