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DaoistPCowBD
DaoistPCowBDLv41yr
2023-06-02 05:38

Blind character in naruto is an interesting idea but author collected all cliches from chinese MS stories and dumped it right from the start. MC feels like cardboard(and of course everyone wiil praise him as an geniues, exept his chinese style enemies )

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Daoist_Dan
Daoist_DanLv10

We have not read the same story.

Hkj
HkjAuthor

i tried not have anything similar to Chinese I mean in character wise and tried to be more logical. can u tell me the what made you think so?

DaoistThreeTrees
DaoistThreeTreesLv4

Uh, just off the top of my head, because I'm not going to go back and look, in the first couple chapters you have characters gossiping about a 3 year old kid, right in his face, at his mother's funeral. Then you made it seem like all the hyuga elders are extremely arrogant and stupid-evil. You also implied the clan head would have suppressed/killed the MC's father just because the father had the potential to become stronger... and that the clan would, what, kick out a 4 year old into the streets just because he's blind? There's also the way the MC emotionlessly goes on about avenging his parents. definitely a lot of bad Chinese webnovel vibes. Oh, and the MC was 'refining' chakra, as if Chakra isn't something that every living thing on the planet creates just by being alive.

Hkj:i tried not have anything similar to Chinese I mean in character wise and tried to be more logical. can u tell me the what made you think so?
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Jack_Gilgamesh
Jack_GilgameshLv12

is chinese

machadogbc
machadogbcLv15

Romance?

Hkj:i tried not have anything similar to Chinese I mean in character wise and tried to be more logical. can u tell me the what made you think so?
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Godson_Godson_4730
Godson_Godson_4730Lv4

tf are u on I just read I didn't see any Chinese "vide" and trust me I hate them type of ff

DaoistThreeTrees:Uh, just off the top of my head, because I'm not going to go back and look, in the first couple chapters you have characters gossiping about a 3 year old kid, right in his face, at his mother's funeral. Then you made it seem like all the hyuga elders are extremely arrogant and stupid-evil. You also implied the clan head would have suppressed/killed the MC's father just because the father had the potential to become stronger... and that the clan would, what, kick out a 4 year old into the streets just because he's blind? There's also the way the MC emotionlessly goes on about avenging his parents. definitely a lot of bad Chinese webnovel vibes. Oh, and the MC was 'refining' chakra, as if Chakra isn't something that every living thing on the planet creates just by being alive.
RustyBoi
RustyBoiLv4

I‘m more tempted to believe the guy with 24 likes on review and 18 likes on reply explaining while author has 1 like on his reply, which never happens on a novel people like

Godson_Godson_4730:tf are u on I just read I didn't see any Chinese "vide" and trust me I hate them type of ff
Kurotora
KurotoraLv15

the Hyuga elders are arrogant and will do anything to keep their power. so that's not off base from cannon.

DaoistThreeTrees:Uh, just off the top of my head, because I'm not going to go back and look, in the first couple chapters you have characters gossiping about a 3 year old kid, right in his face, at his mother's funeral. Then you made it seem like all the hyuga elders are extremely arrogant and stupid-evil. You also implied the clan head would have suppressed/killed the MC's father just because the father had the potential to become stronger... and that the clan would, what, kick out a 4 year old into the streets just because he's blind? There's also the way the MC emotionlessly goes on about avenging his parents. definitely a lot of bad Chinese webnovel vibes. Oh, and the MC was 'refining' chakra, as if Chakra isn't something that every living thing on the planet creates just by being alive.
Honoured_Writer
Honoured_WriterLv4

Not really the only instance thats actually been shown of the Hyūgas involving political matters is the hinata kidnapping attempt and the bird seal

Kurotora:the Hyuga elders are arrogant and will do anything to keep their power. so that's not off base from cannon.
Kurotora
KurotoraLv15

if they aren't arrogant and wanting to keep their power, why else would they force the seal on family members?

Honoured_Writer:Not really the only instance thats actually been shown of the Hyūgas involving political matters is the hinata kidnapping attempt and the bird seal
Ur_Mom_Gay_lol
Ur_Mom_Gay_lolLv4

why would they allow Hiashi to get rid of it?

Kurotora:if they aren't arrogant and wanting to keep their power, why else would they force the seal on family members?
Kurotora
KurotoraLv15

they don't which is my point the "main" branch only cares about their own power

Ur_Mom_Gay_lol:why would they allow Hiashi to get rid of it?
Ur_Mom_Gay_lol
Ur_Mom_Gay_lolLv4

it's gone it Shippuden?

Kurotora:they don't which is my point the "main" branch only cares about their own power
Mamur
MamurLv3

Actually, there's something I've always wondered. Why wasn't MC castrated when he was kicked out of the clan? The Hyuga Clan are maniacs who will mark the entire clan with the seal of slavery to prevent their kekkei genkai from leaking out. The fact that he is blind does not change the fact that he is still a potential Byakugan factory, all Danzo needs is a dose of aphrodisiac and a hundred women. After 9 months, he can obtain up to an additional 50 pairs of Byakugan. Man, I don't think anybody's gonna forget this.

Hkj:i tried not have anything similar to Chinese I mean in character wise and tried to be more logical. can u tell me the what made you think so?
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Mohamedk123
Mohamedk123Lv4

But there no real prove of that they can do that simply becuse they don’t want anyone eye taken and from what we saw the only people who do not have seal are the people next in line for power and most those people dose not show couurption

Kurotora:they don't which is my point the "main" branch only cares about their own power
Kurotora
KurotoraLv15

they are accomplices of the corruption by continuing to use the seal

Mohamedk123:But there no real prove of that they can do that simply becuse they don’t want anyone eye taken and from what we saw the only people who do not have seal are the people next in line for power and most those people dose not show couurption
Aztec_Azazel
Aztec_AzazelLv13

you really think you MC does logical things? all the " i dont fight someone weaker than me" "even the teachers are not worth my time" is all this logical? sometimes in template novels, the MC can exhist some personality of the template charater but i dont remember Fujitora being an arrogant young master 🤣🤣🤣🤣

Hkj:i tried not have anything similar to Chinese I mean in character wise and tried to be more logical. can u tell me the what made you think so?
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Martial_Pursuit
Martial_PursuitLv4

Because fujitora is the character while the MC is is one using his template the kid himself is the arrogant one not the template overriding his original personality

Aztec_Azazel:you really think you MC does logical things? all the " i dont fight someone weaker than me" "even the teachers are not worth my time" is all this logical? sometimes in template novels, the MC can exhist some personality of the template charater but i dont remember Fujitora being an arrogant young master 🤣🤣🤣🤣
Peryite
PeryiteLv5

I kept getting recommended this so thank you for snuffing out my desire to read it

strawhatmattad1
strawhatmattad1Lv15

Ik there still a plot hole in the explanation but the clan wanted the mc dead so I don’t think they thought off needing to worry about future issues. The hokage got involved so problem ended.

Mamur:Actually, there's something I've always wondered. Why wasn't MC castrated when he was kicked out of the clan? The Hyuga Clan are maniacs who will mark the entire clan with the seal of slavery to prevent their kekkei genkai from leaking out. The fact that he is blind does not change the fact that he is still a potential Byakugan factory, all Danzo needs is a dose of aphrodisiac and a hundred women. After 9 months, he can obtain up to an additional 50 pairs of Byakugan. Man, I don't think anybody's gonna forget this.
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