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DragonslayerKnight
DragonslayerKnightLv41yr
2023-05-23 14:31

poor execution of plot. standard statutory r@pe and pedophilia grooming. low intelligence mc and author. nonsense system that slows the pacing and has multiple plot holes in just about every other chapter.

In Naruto With Minato Template (Complete)

kamidemond
3.9
310 Chs

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kamidemond
kamidemondAuthor

sorry to hear did not like still need a lot to learn about writing

1yr
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DragonslayerKnight
DragonslayerKnightLv4

I didn't say I didn't like it 😭 although it is a terrible read, I was just giving my honest opinion in review. it would improve significantly if you stopped the pedophilia and grooming children and you just, I don't know wrote a story that was about someone in the Naruto world with a template system that has a consistent plot

kamidemond:sorry to hear did not like still need a lot to learn about writing
1yr
8
MajorLove_Gravy
MajorLove_GravyLv4

what do you mean grooming, is it the mc or is the mc being groomed?

DragonslayerKnight:I didn't say I didn't like it 😭 although it is a terrible read, I was just giving my honest opinion in review. it would improve significantly if you stopped the pedophilia and grooming children and you just, I don't know wrote a story that was about someone in the Naruto world with a template system that has a consistent plot
1yr
1
DragonslayerKnight
DragonslayerKnightLv4

the mc is grooming children so he can indulge in pedophilia

MajorLove_Gravy:what do you mean grooming, is it the mc or is the mc being groomed?
1yr
9
drago282007
drago282007Lv3

Do you want him to hook up with someone way older than him don't forget the body is still that of a child

DragonslayerKnight:the mc is grooming children so he can indulge in pedophilia
1yr
5
drago282007
drago282007Lv3

I'm really curious on what the rewards for 60,70,80,90 and 100 percent are any hints to any of them even a small hint I heard som author's give hints from time to time or maybe a birthday gift from the system for 14 and 15 years old

kamidemond:sorry to hear did not like still need a lot to learn about writing
1yr
1
kamidemond
kamidemondAuthor

there are already many hints in the chapters themselves.and I left tons of hints in the upcoming chapters

drago282007:I'm really curious on what the rewards for 60,70,80,90 and 100 percent are any hints to any of them even a small hint I heard som author's give hints from time to time or maybe a birthday gift from the system for 14 and 15 years old
1yr
toshisero
toshiseroLv4

yeah author even make it haku raped by zabuza so mc can became the knight in armor and save her after killing zabuza. im not even saying other sh#t on this trash of a fanfic

9mth
5
Carlos_Perez_1367
Carlos_Perez_1367Lv1

Básicamente estás llorando por tonterías, es su historia y puede hacer con ella lo que le plazca.

DragonslayerKnight:I didn't say I didn't like it 😭 although it is a terrible read, I was just giving my honest opinion in review. it would improve significantly if you stopped the pedophilia and grooming children and you just, I don't know wrote a story that was about someone in the Naruto world with a template system that has a consistent plot
8mth
Carlos_Perez_1367
Carlos_Perez_1367Lv1

You made randoms cry and that's why I admire you. They forget that the real world is much worse than fanfic and they must get out of their bubble.

8mth
2
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Madara_Otsutsuki_
Madara_Otsutsuki_Lv4

Others may like it, but not for me. He is the son of Minato, and get his template. Rather than being a genius, he got 1000x worst, in exchange for getting 100x the original strength of the technique he wanted to learn. He hides his strength to not let the higher ups suspicious about him. But they know that he is training all the time, isn't that suspicious as a son of one of the most genius ninja in konoha's history? Yeah he hide it even though for me he doesn't need to because it's not unexpected, especially he is the son of Minato and not a jinjuriki. Not my cup of tea. ..

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Tsukuyomi777
Tsukuyomi777Lv4

This is just one of those thousands OP MC fanfics where the MC has everything figured out before he is even born For example Itachi Obito and Zetsu can definitely sense a 8 year old using jutsu And if finding root base was so easy then it would have been a tourist attraction at this point Not to mention he is just casually talking about using Hiraishin etc There was a reason why only Minato and Tobirama were albe to learn it not some 8 year old Zero focus on the character development the MC has zero personlity

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_JuneDays_oz
_JuneDays_ozLv14

Story is boring following too many tropes, mc is a pepo by grooming ino, author destroyed team 7 by adding ino to the team. Many plot holes. System is trash and without it mc would be nothing. He’s able to trick obito with little to planning, plot is not consistent, scaling is out of thrown out the window. I’m giving it a one star, because author said ino and mc are just friends and not even the next chapter ino and mc become a “couple”. Mc name is kirito no need to explain. Grammar is alright, but nothing to write about though. Character development is weird and mc is way to irrational. Language use for system is off like [100x critical hit] but mc never attacked anyone or was attacked, it some type of reward multiplier which is just way to op. Author makes mc op but nerfs him the next chapter, like 100x rasengan damage but it doesn’t even kill anyone other than mob characters. Last but not least let me reiterate mc is a pepo/groomer.

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Xiphos_Gladius_03
Xiphos_Gladius_03Lv1

I like how this MC has a brain unlike other fanfics, and doesn't use others for his benefit. I hope you can keep updating the fanfic. Good luck! 🍀

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Byluffy02
Byluffy02Lv12

The stencil system is already good enough, adding the most absurd 100x power there is to the story. The subject of books with 100x power has to enter a dead end at a certain point.

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Mister_Robot
Mister_RobotLv4

If you have a brain, this fanfic is not for you. It's more or less a good wet dream of every brain dead simp. 1 star is actually too much for this rubbish

1yr
Drako_0692
Drako_0692Lv1

Another overpowered protagonist and not only has a system that gives him crazy powers development sucks and is quite intrusive at times , , , , , , , , , ,

1yr
Marn97
Marn97Lv4

trash MC. he thinks big, train big, small action when he got strong. only do the talking. may have 2 personality

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Alejandr0
Alejandr0Lv2

Before you start reading this fic I warn you that the MC is OP and the label (weak to strong) is false. The title of this fic is also fake, it doesn't have anything resembling a template, it's just a system that gives him a lot of powers that Minato Namikaze has and doesn't have. The author always makes the MC fight without using all of his abilities and powers and the battles last 3 or 5 chapters. Great possibilities of HAREM and if not INO and an OC that the author created in a journey that lasted from chapter 100 to 162 that apart from obtaining "conqueror haki" and Fūinjutsu from Mito Uzumaki himself added an OC UZUMAKI as a love interest, completely eliminating to Karin Uzumaki and the trip to the past does not affect her future at all. After returning and starting Naruto Shippuden, the author weakens the MC again and in the end takes away the system and everything he obtained. In short, this starts off bad and gets worse over time. There may also be trips to other worlds or a crossing of worlds. And these are important examples, then there are more details to continue mentioning how bad this FAN-FICS is.

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