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Bierbart
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2023-03-25 22:03

The premise is good and nice. sadly the mc still as too many beta japanese mc traits :/ As a "golden finger" he has a hard nerfed version of a pretty much OP skill and the boni from original yun che. sadly bad decision making, the hard nerf and some other kind of scams from the "system/menü"(cant with good concious really define it as such) make him barely stronger than original yun che and the canon story still gets forced in some way.. So the development is pretty disappointing and a slightly simping beta slice of life mostly. guess this might be a really old work of the author since i remember 1 or 2 dropped works from him which were better developmentwise

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meatball_san
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Well yah. I did explain in discord that it's pretty old work, but ppl in the discord wanted me to post it, so I did. I continued it around 51 or so chapters.

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With so much experience you can write A novel or whatever you are

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What you expect this meat ball although he is a good author but his character development is subpar

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