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2023-08-22 13:13

No harem is a shame that must be corrected🗿

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you call for war

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bruh, your name💀💀

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ExodusGaming555
ExodusGaming555Lv6

Reading status: Finished the first volume Writing Quality 5 ⭐ : Nothing to comment here Story Development 3 ⭐ : How the plot progress is decent but getting rather stale real quickly too. Author should introduce better hooks to keep the story more engaging. Some plot points feel forced like how mc and the hero get banished. As a person who liked to sleep for a prolonged time, what's the reason for him to sneak to the Library at all in the Middle of the night? the rationale of his actions is near non-existent except for him having chuuni syndrome but it's still not convincing as mc main trait is his sleepiness. Not only that, i suggested to add more details to your story like showing the surroundings, giving more vivid description to things like combat. Character Design 4 ⭐ :The characters introduced so far have good character building and they stay true to themselves but my main problem is with the mc itself. Look, Mc quirks and action seems too unsynchronized to me. look at him from before and after the banishment, we can chalk up his act of sneaking into the library at the middle of the night as his adverse reaction to the guys who summon them which also highlights his intelligence somewhat, then the snake village arc make me feel his iq degraded. After surviving from the misty forest arc, mc Should have grown more wiser. plus i call bs that after 2 years his mana is still at 3 points when he have the adaptability unique skill and also no way that a large source of water always existed that cause him to never use his create water magic. In short i feel mc is very unsynchronized Updating Stability 5 ⭐ : no comment here World Background 4 ⭐ (actually 3 ⭐) : The world building is not that clear for now. The power system in this novel was okay but lack utilization and refinement imo. I'll chuck it up to the story is only 50 chp and an inexperienced author hence a *pitty* 1 ⭐ extra was given Conclusion: A decent novel that you all could try to read. it have it's imperfections but each character stay true to their personalities. Worth looking forward to.

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