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Asthoglho
AsthoglhoAuthor2yr
2023-02-15 20:35

Author here, I don't have any experience in writing and this is a Wish Fulfillment fic so don't expect anything grand. Enjoy it though.

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Lucinziel
LucinzielLv13

as long as you don't make him join some devil's peerage, everything will be fine, also don't suddenly nerf him

Veany
VeanyLv1

I'm also a newbie writer and I wish you luck and all the best.!

WIKKY
WIKKYLv4

Im also a new author I wish you well. :)

VividSilverWolf
VividSilverWolfLv14

From newbie to newbie good luck

Spelloyal
SpelloyalLv12

I recommend you put in the title or at least in the Synopsis something that says what anime this fanfic is, since most ignore fanfics that are not about works they like. If it's multiverse, I recommend putting multiverse in the title and the worlds that the MC has already been through in the synopsis.

mashedpotato37
mashedpotato37Lv14

great job at the story 👍, anyways... do you know another good dxd fic

SkyNeves
SkyNevesLv11

Hey author I prefer to post complaints or thoughts here instead of making lame 1 star reviews because of one single thing so... You said something about powerful beings to level the playing field or something along those lines but doesn't DxD already have lots of those beings? Just the Indian Pantheon has lots of them like Lord Shiva, so is there a need to add more who are probably not from DxD?

Lord_Hastur
Lord_HasturLv5

is this a harem??

Helios_Sol
Helios_SolLv5

harem

Cpal_Yshed
Cpal_YshedLv4

Is he based on Takatou Yogiri or is he just someone you made up

Taro
TaroLv15

DxD is only the beginning of ExE. They are mor powerful than the beings in DxD. Sooo. Ya.

SkyNeves:Hey author I prefer to post complaints or thoughts here instead of making lame 1 star reviews because of one single thing so... You said something about powerful beings to level the playing field or something along those lines but doesn't DxD already have lots of those beings? Just the Indian Pantheon has lots of them like Lord Shiva, so is there a need to add more who are probably not from DxD?
Nothingness_
Nothingness_Lv3

umu

Lucinziel:as long as you don't make him join some devil's peerage, everything will be fine, also don't suddenly nerf him
Nothingness_
Nothingness_Lv3

harem list : Gabriel, sona, ingvlid?, great red, ophis, serafall

ZeaZ_
ZeaZ_Lv13

The fact that you chose Sona, Mashiro, and Koneko to be close to him definitely tells us that you like small BB lol. And I LIKE IT!!🥰 Good luck and pls don't drop this. 😍

Helios_Sol
Helios_SolLv5

koneko in harem

DaoistmXBnrL
DaoistmXBnrLLv4

harem author?

Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

A few things I dislike. First of all is bringing other animes or animes characters into the story when it’s unnecessary. DXD is a huge world there are tons of faction for possible OCs there’s no need to bring other animes/characters except laziness. It also doesn’t help thay often the new introduced anime world/anime characters often detract and take time away from the MC and the original DXD characters. This is a DXD fic, I want a focus on the MC and DXD characters like Rias, Akeno, Sairorg, Azazel, etc. Not other characters from who knows what anime the Author decided to suddenly shoehorn into the story. Another problem I have is Sona, just Sona honestly. I don’t really like her, she’s no that interesting and she not attractive either. Tsubaki and Momo from her peerage are way better in all aspects. I don’t get the obsession with her. It would be acceptable if it was a harem and she joined but if she’s the single love interest (or main Focus) as it’s implied well that’s a huge disappointment. And another thing, how can someone write a DXD fanfic with no harem. It’s like a Harry Potter fic with no magic. If you really love Single loves and hate harems that’ great but go have no harems in other anime worlds. DXD is basically built for harems. I know you have the harem tag but I just wanted to vent a little. Actually there another problem I have. how is this a DXD fic if half of the story is apparently taking place in Tensura? Talk about false advertising.

Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

Wow what a horrible line up

ZeaZ_:The fact that you chose Sona, Mashiro, and Koneko to be close to him definitely tells us that you like small BB lol. And I LIKE IT!!🥰 Good luck and pls don't drop this. 😍
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

Just an excuse to shoehorn in a brunch of unnecessary animes into the story

SkyNeves:Hey author I prefer to post complaints or thoughts here instead of making lame 1 star reviews because of one single thing so... You said something about powerful beings to level the playing field or something along those lines but doesn't DxD already have lots of those beings? Just the Indian Pantheon has lots of them like Lord Shiva, so is there a need to add more who are probably not from DxD?
Crimson_King
Crimson_KingLv6

Yeah I was so annoyed to find that DXD only made up half the chapters. I was here for DXD not Tensura and definitely not a multiverse.

Spelloyal:I recommend you put in the title or at least in the Synopsis something that says what anime this fanfic is, since most ignore fanfics that are not about works they like. If it's multiverse, I recommend putting multiverse in the title and the worlds that the MC has already been through in the synopsis.
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TruthOnlyReader
TruthOnlyReaderLv5

I am gonna write a more detailed review than my last one since I only said I just like it. Writing quality, it's has good grammar and everything barely any errors. That readers can usually spot. The only problem I have is of course you included characters from other anime which is fine, but me personally I would love if you focus more on the aspect of the DXD universe more. But I am fine with the MC learning other skills since he is basically death himself. Story Development is good, of course he is gonna be overpowered since he is the literal embodiment of death and there is a lot of funny scenes I love in this novel. Especially his cute obsession with Sona. The pacing is of course a problem in this novel but it can be fixed in the future. Something that I wish you could do is to expand his ability in the field of art a bit more and there are some plot holes in the University Visitation chapter, like what happened with his paintings or sculptures which needed to be somewhat explained. Other than that story development is good so far. Character design is good, its basically DXD and other animes that you could search with Google, I read novels mostly on my phone, so computer users will have a easier time to find the anime characters online. So far so good. Updating Stability is amazing, sometimes we get 1 to 3 chapters a day which is a lot. That is saying a lot also about author dedication and research to this novel. No pressure. World Background, is just DXD with other animes, but the main premise is DXD of course. So far a good novel that I look forward to reading in my day, and I hope you can continue. Hope you can take my review into consideration and that it helps you have to proceed with this novel.

Bierbart
BierbartLv14
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