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eccentricbeing18
eccentricbeing18Lv41yr
2023-02-25 12:02

Well, it was good before chapter 11. We can see how the rugged life of the north corrupted him bit by bit which is realistic in a way but it slowly starts going downhill from there. It looks like the author is trying to make the story into a Vinland saga kind of story. The mc gets more irrational in his decisions but the plot armor dictates it works out well. Things like having the savagery for carnage like an Ironborn but is still liked by his people. Telling how he almost raped a wildling to his wife with no remorse without any marital consequence. Seriously, she proclaimed that it was the worst thing she ever heard in her whole life. There are no repercussions after that whatsoever. A sheltered noble from the Reach has heard 2 of the worst things in her life from the person she's supposed to spend the rest of her life with but nothing happened. Then, his decision to kill wildlings for the next 25 years to somehow lessen the Night King's army. Hays... This is the stupidest thing I have ever heard. Thousands of years had already passed. The Night King already has his enormous army. The wildlings that is still alive is barely half a percent of the dead in those thousands of years. Even if with some miracle, you manage to kill every wildling and ship of their remains of there, it will barely leave a mark on the Night King's army. Not only did you kill potential soldiers, but your men also died a meaningless battle. The edge of this fic is too narrow it can cut atoms. That's how st*pidly edgy this is.

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JManM
JManMAuthor

By your estimate the Night King has an army of over thirteen million wights as he has gathered all the dead Wildlings for eight thousand years. If you really think this is the case, then what is the point of any GoT fanfic? With numbers like that the Night King can just golf clap while his army World War Z's the Wall and destroys all life on Westeros. Perhaps that is how Martin wants to end the series as he is tired of writing it, but for there to be any narrative payoff in the plot line then this simply can't be the case. This story is written with the belief that Jon's plotline is more than a waste of time and that the people of Westeros can defeat the Others by getting their act together. Also, bones disintegrate within a century of death. While we could argue about magical preservation this does not seem to be the case with the Others. As such the only feasible number for the Others on hand stock is about 150,000. If there are 100,000 Wildlings and Jorah kills them all and prevents the Others from getting them he has enacted a 40% change in army size through his own actions. Feel free to complain about the morality of the MC, this is a GoT/ASoIaF fic. Moral arguments are entirely stupid in this fandom, but don't come with that weak logic.

AllenCross
AllenCrossLv1

I'll make a correction, you may have forgotten but the bones are in the northern wastelands where the temperature is very low and the ground is mostly frozen and some places only have ice over the ground. So bones can be stored for a couple thousand years or more, and also a couple hundred years can be stored for a bone skeleton structure with frozen skin and rotten meat. Since the bacteria and insects that carry out this cleavage process do not live in a year-round freeze, they either sleep or die (more likely option 2) as they cannot feed. As an example, the bones of prehistoric animals and humans. So the king has an army exactly more than 100 thousand, but no more, the reason for the very low population density.

JManM:By your estimate the Night King has an army of over thirteen million wights as he has gathered all the dead Wildlings for eight thousand years. If you really think this is the case, then what is the point of any GoT fanfic? With numbers like that the Night King can just golf clap while his army World War Z's the Wall and destroys all life on Westeros. Perhaps that is how Martin wants to end the series as he is tired of writing it, but for there to be any narrative payoff in the plot line then this simply can't be the case. This story is written with the belief that Jon's plotline is more than a waste of time and that the people of Westeros can defeat the Others by getting their act together. Also, bones disintegrate within a century of death. While we could argue about magical preservation this does not seem to be the case with the Others. As such the only feasible number for the Others on hand stock is about 150,000. If there are 100,000 Wildlings and Jorah kills them all and prevents the Others from getting them he has enacted a 40% change in army size through his own actions. Feel free to complain about the morality of the MC, this is a GoT/ASoIaF fic. Moral arguments are entirely stupid in this fandom, but don't come with that weak logic.
Tigre_Negro008
Tigre_Negro008Lv2

To say that moral arguments are stupid in the ASOIAF fando just shows that the author has the same taste as those teenage otakus who like protagonists committing a lot of depravities for their so-called goals. What is more impressive is that even the Lords of Westeros with their weak morals still make slavery a crime, something that the protagonist finds he does without any weight on his conscience. Using a cruel world as an excuse to be cruel shows the quality of the story.

hde
hdeLv1

foolish opinion edgelord

JManM:By your estimate the Night King has an army of over thirteen million wights as he has gathered all the dead Wildlings for eight thousand years. If you really think this is the case, then what is the point of any GoT fanfic? With numbers like that the Night King can just golf clap while his army World War Z's the Wall and destroys all life on Westeros. Perhaps that is how Martin wants to end the series as he is tired of writing it, but for there to be any narrative payoff in the plot line then this simply can't be the case. This story is written with the belief that Jon's plotline is more than a waste of time and that the people of Westeros can defeat the Others by getting their act together. Also, bones disintegrate within a century of death. While we could argue about magical preservation this does not seem to be the case with the Others. As such the only feasible number for the Others on hand stock is about 150,000. If there are 100,000 Wildlings and Jorah kills them all and prevents the Others from getting them he has enacted a 40% change in army size through his own actions. Feel free to complain about the morality of the MC, this is a GoT/ASoIaF fic. Moral arguments are entirely stupid in this fandom, but don't come with that weak logic.
Dr2220
Dr2220Lv12

Bro certain people like different things

Tigre_Negro008:To say that moral arguments are stupid in the ASOIAF fando just shows that the author has the same taste as those teenage otakus who like protagonists committing a lot of depravities for their so-called goals. What is more impressive is that even the Lords of Westeros with their weak morals still make slavery a crime, something that the protagonist finds he does without any weight on his conscience. Using a cruel world as an excuse to be cruel shows the quality of the story.
Mastarius
MastariusLv2

also this fanfic reads more like a pile of complaint, but the army of white walkers and wights are already counted to be around 100k combined and that's after the wildling feed the army of wights/walkers

Tigre_Negro008
Tigre_Negro008Lv2

Gosta de um protagonista estrupador e escravistas definitivamente mostra como teu gosto e diferente, do tipo nojento diferente.

Dr2220:Bro certain people like different things
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Dr2220
Dr2220Lv12

Assim como as pessoas gostam de vikings 😂😂

Tigre_Negro008:Gosta de um protagonista estrupador e escravistas definitivamente mostra como teu gosto e diferente, do tipo nojento diferente.
Tigre_Negro008
Tigre_Negro008Lv2

Vikings só e legal quando tu diz.uma adolescente e não faz a menor ideia que as invasões deles eram apenas roubo, estrupo e chacina. Quando você percebe a série passa a ser mais uma glorificando criminoso. Eu não sou fã de protagonista herói ou santo e muito ingênuo, porém não consigo relacionar com personagem que são vilões e curtem isso, e ainda tem orgulho.

Dr2220:Assim como as pessoas gostam de vikings 😂😂
Dr2220
Dr2220Lv12

Fair enough I dont relate to them either I just like reading about villains and the mc is humerous sometimes

Tigre_Negro008:Vikings só e legal quando tu diz.uma adolescente e não faz a menor ideia que as invasões deles eram apenas roubo, estrupo e chacina. Quando você percebe a série passa a ser mais uma glorificando criminoso. Eu não sou fã de protagonista herói ou santo e muito ingênuo, porém não consigo relacionar com personagem que são vilões e curtem isso, e ainda tem orgulho.
The_man_The_myth
The_man_The_mythLv4

hde:foolish opinion edgelord
The_man_The_myth
The_man_The_mythLv4

Tigre_Negro008:To say that moral arguments are stupid in the ASOIAF fando just shows that the author has the same taste as those teenage otakus who like protagonists committing a lot of depravities for their so-called goals. What is more impressive is that even the Lords of Westeros with their weak morals still make slavery a crime, something that the protagonist finds he does without any weight on his conscience. Using a cruel world as an excuse to be cruel shows the quality of the story.
LuciTitangenl
LuciTitangenlLv5

Hopefully, you know that everyone who has conscience doesn't like edgelords that haven't got talents and no rapist.

Dr2220:Bro certain people like different things
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DetachedDreamer
DetachedDreamerLv14

youre*

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Bobby_Schmurda
Bobby_SchmurdaLv2

this story still inherently doesnt make sense. and "oh people like othersl stuff" doesnt invalidate the fact the got is popular because of its realism. and making things grimderp because oh "darker is realistic" is a bad writing move and will just make a story unpopular.

Dr2220:Bro certain people like different things
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Jaquaviontavious
JaquaviontaviousLv14

“Whenever I get a package of plain M&Ms, I make it my duty to continue the strength and robustness of the candy as a species. To this end, I hold M&M duels. Taking two candies between my thumb and forefinger, I apply pressure, squeezing them together until one of them cracks and splinters. That is the "loser," and I eat the inferior one immediately. The winner gets to go another round. I have found that, in general, the brown and red M&Ms are tougher, and the newer blue ones are genetically inferior. I have hypothesized that the blue M&Ms as a race cannot survive long in the intense theater of competition that is the modern candy and snack-food world. Occasionally I will get a mutation, a candy that is misshapen, or pointier, or flatter than the rest. Almost invariably this proves to be a weakness, but on very rare occasions it gives the candy extra strength. In this way, the species continues to adapt to its environment. When I reach the end of the pack, I am left with one M&M, the strongest of the herd. Since it would make no sense to eat this one as well, pack it neatly in an envelope and send it to M&M Mars, A Division of Mars, Inc., Hackettstown, NJ 17840-1503 U.S.A., along with a 3×5 card reading, "Please use this M&M for breeding purposes." This week they wrote back to thank me, and sent me a coupon for a free 1/2 pound bag of plain M&Ms. I consider this "grant money." | have set aside the weekend for a grand tournament. From a field of hundreds, we will discover the True Champion. There can be only one.” - A soldier whos name is lost in the sands of time. May he rest in peace. From this im sure you have the mental capabilities to assess the quality of this work and all others of its creator.

DetachedDreamer
DetachedDreamerLv14

Good story and great grammar so far. Story is unique-ish you could say but feels more like a direct response to other GOT fanfics and their flaws instead of being its own story. which surprisingly seems to be one of the reasons for much of its praise, I feel thats not exactly how a story should be built on but you can't deny the reviews. a male genitalia fascination, hopefully for comic relief instead of a reason to lord over other male characters like other stories love to do. MC seems to feel slightly superior to all other characters in his mentality and very critical of them, borderline hateful. if you had a dime for all the MCs who bash the people in the world they're in to start off any fanfic story then you'd be rich, this story included. There are good qualities to the MC, even great ones as well, which I suggest reading to find out, because it seems worth it so far. Definitely a unique choice of character to reincarnate as which is a plus. I will continue reading as long as the MCs first thought isn't to bash a character for who they were on a TV show at every turn. when an MC doesn't fully embrace this world as his new reality it really hurts the immersion factor I value in a story and I feel breaking the 4th wall to talk about such things does exactly that. I do love the slow kingdom building sense that the story has except its mostly rooted in bashing other GoT fanfics as I've pointed out earlier. The author does seem knowledgeable in methods he implements to advance his community which I do love. Overall worth it to read. and I definitely wrote too much.

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