Good story and great grammar so far. Story is unique-ish you could say but feels more like a direct response to other GOT fanfics and their flaws instead of being its own story. which surprisingly seems to be one of the reasons for much of its praise, I feel thats not exactly how a story should be built on but you can't deny the reviews. a male genitalia fascination, hopefully for comic relief instead of a reason to lord over other male characters like other stories love to do. MC seems to feel slightly superior to all other characters in his mentality and very critical of them, borderline hateful. if you had a dime for all the MCs who bash the people in the world they're in to start off any fanfic story then you'd be rich, this story included. There are good qualities to the MC, even great ones as well, which I suggest reading to find out, because it seems worth it so far. Definitely a unique choice of character to reincarnate as which is a plus. I will continue reading as long as the MCs first thought isn't to bash a character for who they were on a TV show at every turn. when an MC doesn't fully embrace this world as his new reality it really hurts the immersion factor I value in a story and I feel breaking the 4th wall to talk about such things does exactly that. I do love the slow kingdom building sense that the story has except its mostly rooted in bashing other GoT fanfics as I've pointed out earlier. The author does seem knowledgeable in methods he implements to advance his community which I do love. Overall worth it to read. and I definitely wrote too much.
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There are a few points you brought up that I disagree with. Jorah does not like many people in Westeros, but he is largely complementary of them. Even though he discredits the Starks who in the books and show died like chumps regularly, he still credits their incredible 8000 year dynasty. He hated the Ironborn but I don't think he has ever once referred to them as 'discount vikings' and openly admits there is a reason their naval technology is still dominant and emulates the useful parts of their culture. Jorah views the small folk as simpletons, but admits that they produce enough food for the society to survive regular multi-year famines. The wildiling get no mercy. They are disagreeable cavemen and Jorah refuses to live in proximity to them. I think you've mistaken a 1st person narrator's surly nature as bashing of the characters or setting. Jorah does not do this. He does bash stupid fan fiction tropes, and he does this because... they are stupid. While there are certainly aspects of this story that ridicule fandom tropes, as explained in an early author's note I wouldn't be doing this story if all I had were criticisms of other fanfictions. Jorah's story exists because he has his own story to tell about the rise of a man to great heights via his discipline and will. Also I appreciate that you realized that even though Jorah has a wondrous weiner at no point has it been used to reduce other characters. There's only one character I can think of where that might happen, and the world will be better for it.
