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Lanevicious
LaneviciousLv21yr
2023-08-23 00:44

It's pretty bland at the beginning with a few info dumps and some grammatic errors but that's pretty much understandable.It starts to shine at the later part of the story, around here, you will notice on how much the author improved.Comparing the writing quality from CH1 to the later chapters is like comparing heaven an earth ( i'm not overestimating it! ). It's like every sentences are imbued with elegance, even the MC's inner monologue is not ignored.The pace of the story is just right, if -100 is slow and 100 is fast then it's around 0. Ren's backstory... i'm not gonna talk about it.The characters in the story are on my passing rate since i didn't found any problem with them, the same goes for the world background. I'm expecting the author to improve around this parts- no!, i'm confident that you will improve since there's still a lot of place unexplored in the story.

No More Pain For This Villain.

Satan03
4.4
380 Chs

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Kage_n0_Ou
Kage_n0_OuLv3

Does it get that much better? I read the first 15 chapters but found it unbearable and dropped but everyone seems to be praising it now

1yr
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LucasMorn
LucasMornLv4

I read till ch 50 and it was still slow. Switched to skimming (fast reading) it and then just skipping whole chapters after reading the title. It is still slow lol. Even I am wondering why are the reviews so positive?

Kage_n0_Ou:Does it get that much better? I read the first 15 chapters but found it unbearable and dropped but everyone seems to be praising it now
1yr
1
Kage_n0_Ou
Kage_n0_OuLv3

That sounds more like my experience with it lol.

LucasMorn:I read till ch 50 and it was still slow. Switched to skimming (fast reading) it and then just skipping whole chapters after reading the title. It is still slow lol. Even I am wondering why are the reviews so positive?
1yr
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Ophidian_01
Ophidian_01Lv4

just dont drop it has everything i want so plz dont drop i recommend everyone to read it once or give it a try i am sure it wouldnt dissapoint you .....................................................................................................................................................

2yr

Lucifer_pancakes
Lucifer_pancakesLv4

One of the most appealing aspects of this novel is its unique blend of genres. It seamlessly combines elements of romance and action, creating a truly engaging and dynamic plot. The romantic undertones create an emotional depth that draws readers in, while the intense action scenes keep the adrenaline pumping. The author's writing allows the genres to shine, creating a balanced and satisfying reading experience.Final Thoughts: I highly recommend this novel, and it's definitely one of my favorites in the genre. The author does a good job of giving each character their own unique details, which makes the reading experience smoother. The interactions between the characters is great

1yr
AAA_legend
AAA_legendLv13

In simple terms, this is a GREAT NOVEL, and needs more recognition.Now let's ddep dive...Pros:The world-building is pretty spot-on – not too complicated, not too simple.I love the MC's personality unpredictable yet intriguing.Side characters are well-fleshed out.I didn't spot any grammatical mistakes.The pacing is Just right!Cons:Occasionally, the descriptions of scenes are excessively lengthy.In very few cases MC's decisions/actions seem confusing and sudden(**spoiler **like how he killed Freya and the prostitute and Tiga) although that seems to be part of his personality but I hope they make sense down the line.My expectations:Mary, second most explored side character in terms of screen time, needs significant character development. The current Ren couldn't care less about the pain she caused the previous Ren. She's basically worth zilch to him as long as she's not in his way. Currently, she's just a hypocritical and narrow-minded character. But, if her character stays the same till the end, it's gonna feel like a waste of time. She'll end up as a brain-dead character not worth the time invested. Let's hope that doesn't happen! Her character arc should logically conclude, regardless of her eventual romantic choices.Whether this novel goes harem or not, it's cool either way. But every girl involved should get some solid character development, showing off what makes them unique and strong. Ren's relationships shouldn't just be for show.That's all for now...Great work author and ... DON'T DARE DROP

1yr
md_rizvi
md_rizviLv4

Great novel... It would have been very popular, if not for locking it in such early chapters...

2yr
andrewscooby
andrewscoobyLv1

Just a tip to the author. If you lock the chapters super early, no one will pay because no one will be invested in the characters. It also makes people not want to support your work because you make it seem like the only reason you write is for money.

1yr
The_Last_Native
The_Last_NativeLv15

Like finding novels like this ...story heading in a good direction unless author adds harem that'll derail the plot and realistic mc

1yr
Aryan_Das17
Aryan_Das17Lv14

story is good. every character is interesting and have depth in them. I love to see chemistry between Ren, Mary and Marylin. And i want Ren to beat sheet out of the other chosen ones specially Adam.

2yr
41d
41dLv12

I am very sure that the author is deleting negative reviews as this book is horrible. author loves to upload chapters that are obsolete then will apologize and do it again. the book is VERY slow paced im 170 chapters in and we haven't gotten to anything note worthy besides the crooked island adventure. author needs to take some classes or something.

1yr
VardorStormDragon
VardorStormDragonLv15

I've read 80 chapters and the story so far is pretty good. There are a few times when the MC fumbles and makes some novice errors that are out of character based on the MCs past so the author sometimes forces events to his/her desire instead of letting them develop based on the characters knowledge, skills, and personality but it hasn't been too bad even though it is irksome and a little jarring when it happens. The reason I am dropping is because the MC is a psychopathic maniac with a murder addiction. I am unable to identify with or like or respect the MC. I am aware that there are many who like and/or admire this sort of character because they wish they could be that unbridled, tyrannical, and uncontrolled. I just don't find criminally insane to be a desirable personality trait for an MC. If you like or can tolerate this kind of MC then you will probably really like this novel. The story itself is good so far but the MC is just not to my taste.

1yr
Sahil_8379
Sahil_8379Lv3

I really loved this story and got a little upset when I caught up with it, this novel has everything I love and I need more of it. Please author don't ever think of dropping this and I am egarly waiting for the new chapters.

1yr
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