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Chaos_Creator12
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2023-01-23 05:47

1. Bruh, why did ra separate is divinity and scatter them across the world. it would even make more sense to just sealed is other divinity than scatter than. 2. he is suppose to be smart an 12 level intellect by reading this story he does not show case this or when his father was killed by his uncle he sit there and watch not a level 12 intellect being would do. 3. why scatter is divinity in the first place. it to introduce other gods or for other gods that have the same divinity to absorb it. can other gods sense it.

Marvel: Horus, God of Evolution

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1. Sealing or scattering is the same shii. He wouldn’t be able to use them anyways. 2. Gaining 13-th level intellect intellect doesn’t mean he magically understands the universe. He just has an incredible processing power exponentially greater than a super computer. Like actually think instead of feeling. Do you know Egyptian mythology? His dad isn’t actually dead. 3. I did the scattering because it makes way for the MC to explore and have a reason to. Not because he just wants to see marvel. And no one can sense his divinities nor can they use them.

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RealDarkSeraph:1. Sealing or scattering is the same shii. He wouldn’t be able to use them anyways. 2. Gaining 13-th level intellect intellect doesn’t mean he magically understands the universe. He just has an incredible processing power exponentially greater than a super computer. Like actually think instead of feeling. Do you know Egyptian mythology? His dad isn’t actually dead. 3. I did the scattering because it makes way for the MC to explore and have a reason to. Not because he just wants to see marvel. And no one can sense his divinities nor can they use them.
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