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TheSystemFan
TheSystemFanLv52yr
2022-12-09 02:22

So I like the premise of the story. But there are no punctuations like fullstop or comma. So it's like you are reading one continuous sentence. Also I don't know if the Author wants to improve or not but he should really consider this stuff. I mean adding a fullstop after a complete sentence is a basic requirement to be an author.

In the movie worlds with my system

lucifer_112
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LemonZawodowiec
LemonZawodowiecLv5

oh... so it's probably some MTL...

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Juto
JutoLv14

Most likely, but possibly it is not one. as even mtl translations tend to keep some punctuation of the original author unless there was non in the first place.

LemonZawodowiec:oh... so it's probably some MTL...
2yr
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horrendous_potato
horrendous_potatoLv4

I've never heard some refer to a period as a full stop before.

1yr
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TheSystemFan
TheSystemFanLv5

I'm from India. We use that word here.

horrendous_potato:I've never heard some refer to a period as a full stop before.
1yr
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Ototsu_Yume
Ototsu_YumeLv11

UK too, calling it a period is a yank thing.

TheSystemFan:I'm from India. We use that word here.
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