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Syler_Blade
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2023-03-25 01:13

Chapter 1-50 Review ***Possible Spoilers*** First things first, I applaud and thank the author for putting themself and their creation out there for us to read, enjoy, and criticize. The purpose of this review is not to bash the author in any way but solely to equip potential readers with a better understanding of whether this novel is a right fit for them. First I will start with the pros: 1) The Writing is well done. Sure there my be a few typos here or there but there really is no issue with being able to both read and understand the author's intentions. 2) At the time writing this review its seems that the novel is being updated on a regular bases. 3) The author has "hinted" at a large world (or worlds in this novel) that should hopefully provide many chapters worth of world building and entertainment. 4) I like that the MC is not a sociopath, borderline psychotic, or straight up evil as that seems to be the trend lately. CONS: 1) The MC is pretty dense and I 'personally' have a hard time with dense MCs, especially if the book carries the romance and harem tags. 2)If you came to the book because of the Romance and Harem tags you will need to be very patient. The only "romance"(if it can be called that) we see is very one sided, or does not involve the MC at all. And while there is more than one girl that is interested in him, 'Harem' implies for more than just interest and multiple women following him around. With the MC's current mindset I don't see true romance or a harem even remotely close. 3) The MC is more of a 'damsel in distress' MC, meaning he is always the one being saved not doing the saving. 4) The MC fails the 'litmus test". The MC, who is loved by a goddess who secretly wants the MC to become a god so she can be with him, gives him a super powerful god's powers and to top it off he also has a system at his disposal, yet, he is still the weakest character in the book while at the same time being told that he is meant to be the strongest and a ruler.... it's more than a little frustrating. Also, he is slave to both his system and his power has he has no control over either and both will and/or has, punished him in some way and neither have helped in any significant way. So far the system is really just there for the MC to banter back and forth with. As you can see most my issues stem from the main character. It just feels like the author is not in the MC's corner. Also, not necessarily a CON, but it almost seems that one of the heroines is being introduced as a second lead, who basically is "favorite" child of the author, as the benefits she gets from the smallest of tasks put the MC to shame. He spends 3 or 4 days doing quests as well as completing a dungeon just to rank up one stat. She gets her first quest, completes it in 5 mins and gets enough to rank up two stats. As everyone's opinions differ on different topics please take this review with a grain of salt. I have come to realize I am pretty picky when it comes to a stories MCs so it's possible I could be being a little too harsh. Reviews tend to always be heavy on the negatives, but overall the premise of the story is good and has a lot of potential, so with that in mind I suggest you read the free chapters and decide for yourself, you may find it very enjoyable.

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kinji_yun
kinji_yunLv4

can you send another invite on discord

Veasna_TDM
Veasna_TDMLv11

This is just me ranting but The mc just have the weak mentality that always need someone to show him what to do. After 30-40 chapter that I read, never once did he show his intension to revive his death family member. He doesn't even mention the revival once after meeting the goddess. His helper (the goddess, system, and the shadow power) never really help him much, if anything they cause him more trouble instead. The Goddess kill him and isekai him with the ability for other to read his thought. That a massive debuff, and his biggest secret of being a reincanator got expose soon after. His system is only there to talk, doesn't help him much, compare to the female lead system, which is too helpful instead. His shadow power first almost kill his new family, and when he need it power most, it completely useless. Author, what is even the point of showing how powerful his shadow power is, if you have no intention for the mc to use that power? Author keep saying how op his ability is, but always make him being useless and cause trouble for other to show how incompetent the mc is. His background of surviving an apocalypse never really shown at all in his mentality. the only time it was show was in a fight with his sister and that it. Not to mention, a lot of material are very similar to solo leveling, To the point that it wouldn't be strange to say it a fan fic with solo leveling element in it.

ThanatosPierce
ThanatosPierceLv1

nice

Flooksan
FlooksanLv11

Thank you for the recommendation. It saved me from wasting time reading that novel. I prefer protagonists who are selfish and evil because good protagonists are annoying. From your description, the protagonist’s system frequently talks to him, which I don’t like. I prefer the kind of system in Chinese fanfictions—silent and emotionless. Also, the protagonist’s powers seem useless and uncontrollable, which makes me think the author might prefer writing female protagonists. They seem to put more effort and love into them. The only reason they wrote a male protagonist is probably because male leads are more popular. However, since they poured their personal preferences into the female characters, the story ended up a mess.

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Sorrowthorn
SorrowthornLv13

Reading this novel feels like winning the lottery, or a fair game lol. Writing Quality: Author definitly knows how to write in English, and write well. Besides the occasional mishap reads well and easy and has a great flow. TIP FOR AUTHOR: When writing try to avoid moving/changing point of views (POV) within a chapter. Also make sure what you are saying fits POV of character. (i.e. don't state emotions of other characters, rather their physical reactions) both of these will add a bit more depth to your POV writing. Story Development: Author plays with time well. Skims when necessary, provides flashbacks/dreams to explore past, and draws out the intense action. Author also seems to have a plan already and has set some foundations for the plot. Not much advice to give here. My only worry is about how long this story can get and if the author has already planned far enough ahead. Character Design: This is a big thing for me, to often the MC is the only character that has depth and changes. This author breaks that stereotype and provides depth to many characters (will not spoil it). Each character has their own goal and vices/problems. AUTHOR TIP: some of the flashback info seemed to come out of nowhere. Make sure to foreshadow or show the eefects of what has happened. Updating Stabability: As long as the writing quality stays as good as it has been the updates can change...(though I would reeeeally like to read more now.) World Background: This seems to currently be the weak link, though recent chapters are suggesting otherwise. While the monsters are unique, the world is currently your average magic/fantasy/academy city world. However, as I said before, recent chapters have started to unveil more info about the world...might be more apt to say teasing. My concern is that it is more to do with the plot, and less with the world itself. AUTHOR TIP: for some good examples of built worlds that deviate from the norm check out Brandon Sanderson's books or Robert Jordan's. One suggestion (especially for worlds with different tech/magic from ours) how does that affect society at large (maybe all those with magic become nobles). I know there is a generic framework that many novels have gone off of but find what makes your magic system unique and what effect it's had on society. Thanks for the great read!

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