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diabolic_diablo
diabolic_diabloLv32yr
2023-01-30 16:48

ngl...author u f*ckwd up the mc's anti hero character...first 50 chs were all amazing but then u ruined it....why make the mc suddenly trust Emelia after knowing her for a few weeks that he gives out a big secret to her....u have also made the mc a pervy(a little) shonen hero instead of the anti hero ... seriously this book would have been wonderful with a harem of just 3 to 4....but with the voice hearing part there are gonna be a lot ..I hope u will remove the heart voice from the book soon as the story currently would do even better without it or at least make Elise also hear him ...I still like this book and hope to read more with a bit better fm leads... update soon

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LazyAngel
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Well, thanks for the review. First of all, Rin is not an anti hero character. I really don't know where you came up with that. Second of all, he basically told Emilia nothing at all. She has no idea that he has a system, its jus that he get stronger. Lastly, not every world will have New fmcs. In fact, only a few of them will have New potential love interests.

diabolic_diablo
diabolic_diabloLv3

so what is going to be the personality of the mc .. cause that's the only thing I am worried about??....also don't worry ur book is still great it's just that after reading a lot of simp MCs I am rather critical about the mc character..

LazyAngel:Well, thanks for the review. First of all, Rin is not an anti hero character. I really don't know where you came up with that. Second of all, he basically told Emilia nothing at all. She has no idea that he has a system, its jus that he get stronger. Lastly, not every world will have New fmcs. In fact, only a few of them will have New potential love interests.
LazyAngel
LazyAngelAuthor

He is a neutral character that can do good and bad deeds depending on how he will benefit from it or not. His sole focus are those he cares about and everything else is secondary. I can't say he is a good person or not but he is definetly not beta or a wimp.

diabolic_diablo:so what is going to be the personality of the mc .. cause that's the only thing I am worried about??....also don't worry ur book is still great it's just that after reading a lot of simp MCs I am rather critical about the mc character..
longest_s
longest_sLv3

Author please please please answer me, i dont care what kind of dark past elise had but theres just one thing i want to know, did she get raped or no?? Please author tell me!! my heart is breaking apart just thinking about it

LazyAngel:He is a neutral character that can do good and bad deeds depending on how he will benefit from it or not. His sole focus are those he cares about and everything else is secondary. I can't say he is a good person or not but he is definetly not beta or a wimp.
LazyAngel
LazyAngelAuthor

She isn't.

longest_s:Author please please please answer me, i dont care what kind of dark past elise had but theres just one thing i want to know, did she get raped or no?? Please author tell me!! my heart is breaking apart just thinking about it
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