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SmilingReader99
SmilingReader99Lv142yr
2022-12-30 13:14

OK, so I like the overall idea of this fiction but the Execution of it is just really bad. Please take this review with a grain of salt and read it to the end. CHARACTERS: None of the characters (especially the gods that aren't Hade's siblings) were truly introduced, barely even given any character. Just thrown in here and there with what seemed like little thought. The whole war against Kronos was the best time to flush out the character's of Hades, his siblings and the subordinates. To show their strengths and there weaknesses and how they become estranged to each other. There was barely any banter or conversation between most of these gods before you went straight to conflict. DEVELOPMENT: You could have gone into more detail on basic routines Hades and the other gods did to grow stronger. How Hades guided his few subordinates until they came to trust him. Really just explore a bit of what he could do with all of his powers, or least bring it up in passing. STORY: The first volume of this fiction was horribly rushed but is still the best volume of this fiction. Re-written again and not rushed, it could be a good 40- 50 chapter long read worthy of 5 stars alone. The second volume should be trashed all together. It's like a cluster of half finished short stories that don't give any background information and is loosely tied together. FINAL THOUGHTS: Has a lot of potential and should definitely be re-written. I truly hope with at least some of my criticism in mind, I would love to see this fan fic succeed. Thank you for your time.

Rewritten.

SnowApathie
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44 Chs

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SnowApathie
SnowApathieAuthor

thanks for the review, i will try to explain more in the next volume. as for rewritting, I may do it, but later because I think I am not good enough with writting yet, to truly explain all I want.

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Yo guys this is the author who just noticed that he did not give himself a 5 stars review. I am a newbie author who is trying to get better, so if you have any tips or recommendations don't hesitate and tell me. You can use this review to ask me any question about the fanfic (if you want to ask me respond directly to this review or one of my comment because else I would not get a notification.) Thank you all for reading this and I hope you will enjoy my story.

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