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GalanarLv152yr
2022-11-24 04:11

OK. I will be honest. I could not finish the first paragraph. Not because it wasn't good, but simply because it felt like a data dump to me. The writing quality could be a little better (There were a few typos). I gave 3 stars to updates cuz I don't know how often you do. From what I garnered from what I read, the story wasn't progressing. Character design, well, your gods are well described. World background was plentiful (too much if I'm honest) I'm sure the rest is good, but I couldn't bring myself to finish first :( Keep up the good work though :)

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SnowApathie
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Thanks for the review

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SmilingReader99
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OK, so I like the overall idea of this fiction but the Execution of it is just really bad. Please take this review with a grain of salt and read it to the end. CHARACTERS: None of the characters (especially the gods that aren't Hade's siblings) were truly introduced, barely even given any character. Just thrown in here and there with what seemed like little thought. The whole war against Kronos was the best time to flush out the character's of Hades, his siblings and the subordinates. To show their strengths and there weaknesses and how they become estranged to each other. There was barely any banter or conversation between most of these gods before you went straight to conflict. DEVELOPMENT: You could have gone into more detail on basic routines Hades and the other gods did to grow stronger. How Hades guided his few subordinates until they came to trust him. Really just explore a bit of what he could do with all of his powers, or least bring it up in passing. STORY: The first volume of this fiction was horribly rushed but is still the best volume of this fiction. Re-written again and not rushed, it could be a good 40- 50 chapter long read worthy of 5 stars alone. The second volume should be trashed all together. It's like a cluster of half finished short stories that don't give any background information and is loosely tied together. FINAL THOUGHTS: Has a lot of potential and should definitely be re-written. I truly hope with at least some of my criticism in mind, I would love to see this fan fic succeed. Thank you for your time.

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