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Authority_Lv32yr
2023-03-08 14:45

Sometimes I feel like I'm reading the Naruto Wiki and not fanfiction, the information dump ruins the story so much. In a chapter, only 10% is worth reading, the remaining 90% is information that everyone already knows except those who haven't seen Naruto. I'm still going to put 5/5 because the story is really good and I don't want to discourage the author, I just want to make him understand that he has to change his way of writing.

The Breaking of Fate [High Quality]

Hanma_Jack
4.1

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Zerufuke081205
Zerufuke081205Lv13

In a chapter it explained the whole wiki of Kumo which everyone reading Naruto fic already knows but the dialogue ended in 3 sentences which also contained just information dump about hinata kidnapping the chap didn't add anything to story but wasted time

2yr
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VisionaryVision
VisionaryVisionLv11

I really enjoyed reading, wish there were more chapters. The stories I have recently been reading haven't had the best writing so this was a breath of fresh air.

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Simoncso
SimoncsoLv11

It was a nice read, even considering the info dumps at the start and grammatical errors here and there, until the stupid deal with orochimaru.

2yr
GENGHIS_KHAN
GENGHIS_KHANLv13

It’s good, please don’t drop. Ughjghjghyfghfgygyndjdjejejejdjdjjejejejejejejejjdjdjdjdjdjjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjjdjddjjddjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdjdndjdjdjdjdjjdjdjdjdjd

2yr
Nagisa_Akahoshi
Nagisa_AkahoshiLv4

I don't really like long explanations so I'll keep this short. The story is good, the character relationships is good though a bit forced, and the writing is also good almost with no errors. My problem is the way the story is going, sure the scenes are properly given explanations and informations but it has TOO much information, the story progression is too fast and the chapter is mostly details in a short scene and that makes it hard to focus on the story

2yr
StormFireReborn
StormFireRebornLv13

Reveal spoiler

2yr
SrMori
SrMoriLv13

Love the story. I really wish you would stop with the random dumps on info in the middle of fights. ’Neji’ goes of on a tangent talking about things that people already know, an example of this being a complete recap of what the Rasengan is in the middle of the fight.

2yr
KenTheSlayer
KenTheSlayerLv13

It's an entertaining fanfic but I don't like the constant exposition that keeps happening throughout the novel. There are some minor problems with the story as well but overall it's entertaining. At least it doesn't make me feel like I wasted my time reading it. Also apparently author has some sort of superiority complex about himself/herself, that they don't even accept minor criticisms and just write them off as me being low IQ. Oh well, I will see how this story goes in the future. If only to read what the author will do with Tenseigan.

2yr
R0B
R0BLv2

The story is good, but for me author made questionable choises (mainly reverse plot protection) for the story progression. This novel is also a naruto-verse Wikipedia so prepare to skip half of the content. Also, everyone already watched naruto, so I don't understand why the author rewrites things that we already know will happen. Instead of 3 chapters 1 sentence would've been enough...

1yr
OrdealOfMc
OrdealOfMcLv5

Reveal spoiler

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