Item: The Breaking of Fate [High Quality]
Rating: 3

Nagisa_AkahoshiLv41yr

2023-04-27 19:46

I don't really like long explanations so I'll keep this short. The story is good, the character relationships is good though a bit forced, and the writing is also good almost with no errors. My problem is the way the story is going, sure the scenes are properly given explanations and informations but it has TOO much information, the story progression is too fast and the chapter is mostly details in a short scene and that makes it hard to focus on the story

The Breaking of Fate [High Quality]

Hanma_Jack

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