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SrMori
SrMoriLv132yr
2023-04-05 03:32

Love the story. I really wish you would stop with the random dumps on info in the middle of fights. ’Neji’ goes of on a tangent talking about things that people already know, an example of this being a complete recap of what the Rasengan is in the middle of the fight.

The Breaking of Fate [High Quality]

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SaintGabriel
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thats the worst and makes it hard to read ill be reading a fight and then get 6 paragraphs of info

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Nagisa_Akahoshi
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I don't really like long explanations so I'll keep this short. The story is good, the character relationships is good though a bit forced, and the writing is also good almost with no errors. My problem is the way the story is going, sure the scenes are properly given explanations and informations but it has TOO much information, the story progression is too fast and the chapter is mostly details in a short scene and that makes it hard to focus on the story

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Sometimes I feel like I'm reading the Naruto Wiki and not fanfiction, the information dump ruins the story so much. In a chapter, only 10% is worth reading, the remaining 90% is information that everyone already knows except those who haven't seen Naruto. I'm still going to put 5/5 because the story is really good and I don't want to discourage the author, I just want to make him understand that he has to change his way of writing.

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It's an entertaining fanfic but I don't like the constant exposition that keeps happening throughout the novel. There are some minor problems with the story as well but overall it's entertaining. At least it doesn't make me feel like I wasted my time reading it. Also apparently author has some sort of superiority complex about himself/herself, that they don't even accept minor criticisms and just write them off as me being low IQ. Oh well, I will see how this story goes in the future. If only to read what the author will do with Tenseigan.

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