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TheJiujitsuGuy
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2022-07-22 07:03

First of all, I agree that this FF has a start that I myself agree is mediocre, but I am happy to say that in the following chapters I can adapt well and improve the story. I urge you to give it a chance until at least the end of the Tokyo Revengers arc, as it is from there that I can work more freely without having to deal with the problems that are the strange time travel and the teenager with a psychopathic disorder.

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SAURON_
SAURON_Lv2

before i start i am deeply sorry for ranting but any ado here we begin: can you add in megalo box ,tomorrow joe and other parts of it also JoJo and code breaker maybe sword art online, inuyasha but wont have anything to do with mc but the portal can be used for later plot. a silent voice and fate grand order, record of ragnarok but that will be at the end ,soul eater, ajin. black lagoon, saiki k there are others I want to add but with the current list is good enough for now. also by add i mean suggest also for system can you have the it go though a update to add in gacha that allows mc to pull techniques or abilities once everyday and each week the gacha banner will reset to a different one like for instance if it was berserk anime then he could pull from all the way a rusted iron sword to guts armor and sword plus the ability to nullify all pain then next week it would have a count down reset at 12:00 and change to either a anime or movie/tv show like marvel. the system is ok in quality but is bad for most system fan-fics and sorry for ranting again.

LulzLowKey
LulzLowKeyLv13

I agree with half of your suggestions. Megalo box is an amazing idea. A system gacha is an absolutely stupid idea. I personally haven't read the ff yet, but it seems author is going for a more vanilla take. ex: no system, simple training, no supernatural or superhuman(within limits) etc. sao is a cool addition as well. and a finishing arc of Ragnarok will be cool as well. stuff like JoJo and Fate probably wouldn't fit his story well, tho. My rant doesn't mean much since it's the authors story so if anything is added it's by his discretion.

SAURON_:before i start i am deeply sorry for ranting but any ado here we begin: can you add in megalo box ,tomorrow joe and other parts of it also JoJo and code breaker maybe sword art online, inuyasha but wont have anything to do with mc but the portal can be used for later plot. a silent voice and fate grand order, record of ragnarok but that will be at the end ,soul eater, ajin. black lagoon, saiki k there are others I want to add but with the current list is good enough for now. also by add i mean suggest also for system can you have the it go though a update to add in gacha that allows mc to pull techniques or abilities once everyday and each week the gacha banner will reset to a different one like for instance if it was berserk anime then he could pull from all the way a rusted iron sword to guts armor and sword plus the ability to nullify all pain then next week it would have a count down reset at 12:00 and change to either a anime or movie/tv show like marvel. the system is ok in quality but is bad for most system fan-fics and sorry for ranting again.
TheJiujitsuGuy
TheJiujitsuGuyAuthor

I can do that with other work. This FF will have no extraordinary stories as part of its universe. At most those on the level of Baki or a little above. See my goal is to write fights as humanely as possible, and putting powers into the equation would only be bad for what has already been shown in FF

SAURON_:before i start i am deeply sorry for ranting but any ado here we begin: can you add in megalo box ,tomorrow joe and other parts of it also JoJo and code breaker maybe sword art online, inuyasha but wont have anything to do with mc but the portal can be used for later plot. a silent voice and fate grand order, record of ragnarok but that will be at the end ,soul eater, ajin. black lagoon, saiki k there are others I want to add but with the current list is good enough for now. also by add i mean suggest also for system can you have the it go though a update to add in gacha that allows mc to pull techniques or abilities once everyday and each week the gacha banner will reset to a different one like for instance if it was berserk anime then he could pull from all the way a rusted iron sword to guts armor and sword plus the ability to nullify all pain then next week it would have a count down reset at 12:00 and change to either a anime or movie/tv show like marvel. the system is ok in quality but is bad for most system fan-fics and sorry for ranting again.
SAURON_
SAURON_Lv2

ok thank you for letting me know.

TheJiujitsuGuy:I can do that with other work. This FF will have no extraordinary stories as part of its universe. At most those on the level of Baki or a little above. See my goal is to write fights as humanely as possible, and putting powers into the equation would only be bad for what has already been shown in FF
tyrantTX20
tyrantTX20Lv4

please dont drop

PUERKO_Senpai
PUERKO_SenpaiLv4

write LEMON please

Arthur90
Arthur90Lv1

Yo tengo una duda y es si habrán más personajes como de hajime no ippo, Kenichi u otros animes de artes marciales/peleas ¿

I_L0v3_t1tt13s
I_L0v3_t1tt13sLv3

Love the book so far was wondering if you had an upload schedule

Ghost_Playing
Ghost_PlayingLv14

So, I'm currently wondering whether I was blind or not when adding this story to my library. Like, I was pretty sure that there was no harem tag but now there is. I find it sad, but at the same time I'm glad that I delayed reading this or else I might have been madz from disappointment

Kirito_Kirigaia
Kirito_KirigaiaLv5

you should transfer to scribble-hub web novel getting difficult

TheJiujitsuGuy
TheJiujitsuGuyAuthor

It is already posted there.

Kirito_Kirigaia:you should transfer to scribble-hub web novel getting difficult
214dnde
214dndeLv4

Can we get a chap with whos in the harem

214dnde
214dndeLv4

M8 will there ever be moments between him and a waifu.

Heavenly_Terror
Heavenly_TerrorLv4

How about Kenichi? For the girls and maybe the Ki?

TheJiujitsuGuy:I can do that with other work. This FF will have no extraordinary stories as part of its universe. At most those on the level of Baki or a little above. See my goal is to write fights as humanely as possible, and putting powers into the equation would only be bad for what has already been shown in FF
SaintBleufyre
SaintBleufyreLv12

This book is more like an amalgamation of various anime/mangas in one world put together with a genre that are focused on their slice of life more than on martial arts. Well, as far as on the chapters I'm reading. So, I think the early phase is a bit subpar considering the title and the synopsis are hinting on fighting and all.

TheJiujitsuGuy
TheJiujitsuGuyAuthor

The story is like 80% struggle and 20% everyday life, not least because writing only about the struggle would just be... Meh. Even Baki and Kengan Ashura have their moments where there is no fighting, and just the interaction of their characters.

SaintBleufyre:This book is more like an amalgamation of various anime/mangas in one world put together with a genre that are focused on their slice of life more than on martial arts. Well, as far as on the chapters I'm reading. So, I think the early phase is a bit subpar considering the title and the synopsis are hinting on fighting and all.
SaintBleufyre
SaintBleufyreLv12

Yea, I guess I'm craving for a hype from the get-go... I mean I'm feeling the plot suddenly thickening already just from the start. Well... I'm actually below 10 chapters for now, so IDK...

TheJiujitsuGuy:The story is like 80% struggle and 20% everyday life, not least because writing only about the struggle would just be... Meh. Even Baki and Kengan Ashura have their moments where there is no fighting, and just the interaction of their characters.
FBI_BEAST
FBI_BEASTLv11

yo don't abandon this book it's one of the only books that's actually good on here

Bosu_san
Bosu_sanLv3

Author how about you cross over with Crow and worst to it is similar to tokay revenger but it is classic about school students that fight with each other in school to become leaders and unify gang in school it even have raid other schools,

streek135
streek135Lv15

Yo it’s been like a month since the last chapter, has this story been dropped?

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