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2022-09-16 11:49

Ugh I made it to chapter 15 and gave up. Writing Quality: Yeah It's pretty good for this website, but overall nothing particularly special. The author has this nasty habit of writing really, really long paragraphs that are pretty rambley and hard to read. The worst part of the writing quality is that it reads more like a history . com post than a novel. Like... Things happen, and there IS a connection between them and coherant story... But that's it. It's like the author types up a series of events and that's all. Stability of updates: This is fine. Chapters are long enough and have good enough grammar that waiting for a bit for a chapter is fine. Story Development. Here's the meat of the issue. Even after the MC comes to his senses because a loved one dies before his eyes, he refuses to really do much of anything. He trains... I guess. But there's really no payoff for it. He gets his mangekyo for basically free at the same time as he unlocks his Sharingan, which STARTS as a 2 tomoe. I wouldn't have an issue with the MC being super strong if he actually engaged in any form of conflict, but he just hides. I don't think a single thing in the Naruto world has been changed from the original except that academy students commonly learn C Rank ninjutsu (despite Kakashi saying that's not a thing that even Genin can usually do). Reading this is like rewatching Naruto, but from a decade earlier and worse. Character Design: No character is likeable except his dad and Shisui, who are both killed because the MC refuses to crawl out of his own nihilst doomerism. His mom is annoying and a horrible person, he faces no repercussions for screaming at his Uchiha elite grandparents despite being an outsider to the clan. World background: I mean... it's Naruto... There's nothing else to say about this. Overall, I would skip this one and read Reborn in the Naruto World with Tenseigan instead.

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Overall, it's a good story with fewer if not no grammatical errors, a definite rarity on this site But, there are just a few things about some of the characters that I hate 1. I absolutely hate MC'S mother. after her husband's death, she has the genius idea of getting pumped by Hyuga Hiashi, which led to her pregnancy, so they decided to move out of the clan compound with no financial support, which in turn made her child's life miserable for two months. Yet the MC doesn't seem to even resent her for her irresponsibility, keep in mind that in order to get help for their financial situation, the MC need to beg a lot of people, as for Hiashi... THE DUDE JUST BAILED!! he doesn't help her because of his status as a Hyuga and her status as an Uchiha... But why he doesn't help her secretly? all he did was sends a bunch of toys for his son lol Nobody seems to question her action... NOBODY, the MC just ignored it, his mom doesn't regret it either lol Don't get me wrong I don't have a problem if she wants a fling or two... but with a fking Hyuga?!?! she must've been aware of the repercussions, yet she let her two kids, who are barely even a teenager takes care of her boyfriend kid And more infuriatingly, the Author still paint her as a good person, there just seems to be these ' good character' labels slapped onto her forehead in short, she is an irresponsible mother, who doesn't face her responsibility or seem to care about her child's well being 2. Sometimes I am annoyed by MC's lack of effort, but that's fine I'm still waiting for the 'character development' the Author promised.... yeah nope, it's already chapter 44 and a year or so from the Uchiha massacre, this is his second life and he needs to man up

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So I've been reading this for a while now I'm on chapter 27 or so and I feel like it's time I write a review on this firstly my issues with this is the main character and his family especially the mom like she's so unlikable you expect me to care for her but you made her so unlikeable that I'm hoping she dies when it should be the opposite she makes dumb decisions like I don't even Care that she had to leave the clan compound because she knew what she did was wrong and she hid it too and basically makes this dumb mc work extra hard to make money for the family even though he's technically just a child and all the bad things happening to them is due to her selfishness, now that I'm done with the mom let's talk about our idiot main character sure he doesn't know all the clues and stuff and doesn't remember everything from Naruto but he knows that the clan will be killed off in a couple of years yet he barely works hard to protect the so-called family that he likes his will is so weak like one little thing can happen and it'll change his whole mood to where he'll stop training for a long time he's so weak. It's not even funny without the mangekyo Sharingan he'd probably be at the level of iruka you made him so dumb and reading the story felt kind of off-putting for some reason like it doesn't feel like Naruto it feels more like an American drama show and it gets more obvious when I keep on reading this just doesn't feel right but overall it's okay if you're into these kinds of stories the writing quality is good and updates are frequent character development is beyond atrocious character design is bland World background is pretty good overall ill still probably keep on reading this I don't enjoy it

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