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JStyles
JStylesLv142yr
2022-06-22 12:41

The writting is really really good. Very few grammar mistakes. One of the rare stories where author actually knows how to write The mc is dumb really dumb he is an uchiha but won't learn genjutsu because he is not interested even though he needs every advantage to make sure his family survives He knows that his sister and family will die in future but rarely does more than the bare minimum to become strong Loses his motivation because his rival left him behind, even though he just had the biggest trauma of his life. The author is ruining the story by making the mc have -ive IQ

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MilexKor
MilexKorAuthor

Thank for the feedback! The story is still at the beginning. The MC will eventually grow up.

Yellow_Brick
Yellow_BrickLv2

After seeing the corpses of his family

MilexKor:Thank for the feedback! The story is still at the beginning. The MC will eventually grow up.
VasH
VasHLv14

Yellow_Brick:After seeing the corpses of his family
Ilovenovel
IlovenovelLv14

So I'm not the only one who thought so. Why do Author make the MC stupid and then say "he is going to have a character development", which means their going to become less stupid

Yellow_Brick:After seeing the corpses of his family
mow
mowLv4

Yellow_Brick:After seeing the corpses of his family
mow
mowLv4

Unfortunately that's what most ''character development'' are on this site.

Ilovenovel:So I'm not the only one who thought so. Why do Author make the MC stupid and then say "he is going to have a character development", which means their going to become less stupid
Miegoreng
MiegorengLv7

its difficult if you want to make naruto fanfic with tragedy tag because the whole manga and anime is already TRAGEDY! so, thats why not many people write tragedy bout naruto fanfic because they know how bad the real thing..

MilexKor:Thank for the feedback! The story is still at the beginning. The MC will eventually grow up.
LemonSpatula
LemonSpatulaLv3

MC aint learning genjutsu cuz he is bad at it, its mentioned as an irony there. No one can have a system and insta master everything. he too need time to bring things to perfection

Fede56
Fede56Lv14

let me ask you if you are in a battlefield with a super op gun will you stop using it just cause you are bad at it or will you try to improve to the bare minimum so you show it power

LemonSpatula:MC aint learning genjutsu cuz he is bad at it, its mentioned as an irony there. No one can have a system and insta master everything. he too need time to bring things to perfection
ItsTocgh
ItsTocghLv1

I understand the whole gun metaphor, genjutsu is pretty useful. But he was trying to prepare for a fight with itachi. The guy that single handedly beat one of konoha’s best genjutsu specialists (kurenai) so badly, that the entire fanbase clowns on her to this day. That’s like trying to out batterang Batman.

JStyles
JStylesLv14

You are forgetting that he aint kurenai He got sharingan which is INCREDIBLY OP when it comes to genjutsu

ItsTocgh:I understand the whole gun metaphor, genjutsu is pretty useful. But he was trying to prepare for a fight with itachi. The guy that single handedly beat one of konoha’s best genjutsu specialists (kurenai) so badly, that the entire fanbase clowns on her to this day. That’s like trying to out batterang Batman.
ItsTocgh
ItsTocghLv1

Sure, the sharingan is powerful, but only against people who don’t also have it. Itachi does, and would almost certainly get his genjutsu off before the MC could his, so the second they made eye contact the MC would just immediately get stuck getting mentally stabbed for 72 hours. So your plan would only work if one his mangekyo ability was both genjutsu based, and didn’t require eye contact, and unlikely combination.

JStyles:You are forgetting that he aint kurenai He got sharingan which is INCREDIBLY OP when it comes to genjutsu
Daoist452371
Daoist452371Lv14

The mc being bad at genjutsu makes no sense because the sharingan specializes in genjutsu and it copies jutsu and can see chakra flow which is what genjutsu is controlling the other persons chakra through their senses. So he’s only bad because the author wrote him bad with a nerf

ItsTocgh:Sure, the sharingan is powerful, but only against people who don’t also have it. Itachi does, and would almost certainly get his genjutsu off before the MC could his, so the second they made eye contact the MC would just immediately get stuck getting mentally stabbed for 72 hours. So your plan would only work if one his mangekyo ability was both genjutsu based, and didn’t require eye contact, and unlikely combination.
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Ur_Mom_Gay
Ur_Mom_GayLv4

Overall, it's a good story with fewer if not no grammatical errors, a definite rarity on this site But, there are just a few things about some of the characters that I hate 1. I absolutely hate MC'S mother. after her husband's death, she has the genius idea of getting pumped by Hyuga Hiashi, which led to her pregnancy, so they decided to move out of the clan compound with no financial support, which in turn made her child's life miserable for two months. Yet the MC doesn't seem to even resent her for her irresponsibility, keep in mind that in order to get help for their financial situation, the MC need to beg a lot of people, as for Hiashi... THE DUDE JUST BAILED!! he doesn't help her because of his status as a Hyuga and her status as an Uchiha... But why he doesn't help her secretly? all he did was sends a bunch of toys for his son lol Nobody seems to question her action... NOBODY, the MC just ignored it, his mom doesn't regret it either lol Don't get me wrong I don't have a problem if she wants a fling or two... but with a fking Hyuga?!?! she must've been aware of the repercussions, yet she let her two kids, who are barely even a teenager takes care of her boyfriend kid And more infuriatingly, the Author still paint her as a good person, there just seems to be these ' good character' labels slapped onto her forehead in short, she is an irresponsible mother, who doesn't face her responsibility or seem to care about her child's well being 2. Sometimes I am annoyed by MC's lack of effort, but that's fine I'm still waiting for the 'character development' the Author promised.... yeah nope, it's already chapter 44 and a year or so from the Uchiha massacre, this is his second life and he needs to man up

finalgetsuga
finalgetsugaLv1

So I've been reading this for a while now I'm on chapter 27 or so and I feel like it's time I write a review on this firstly my issues with this is the main character and his family especially the mom like she's so unlikable you expect me to care for her but you made her so unlikeable that I'm hoping she dies when it should be the opposite she makes dumb decisions like I don't even Care that she had to leave the clan compound because she knew what she did was wrong and she hid it too and basically makes this dumb mc work extra hard to make money for the family even though he's technically just a child and all the bad things happening to them is due to her selfishness, now that I'm done with the mom let's talk about our idiot main character sure he doesn't know all the clues and stuff and doesn't remember everything from Naruto but he knows that the clan will be killed off in a couple of years yet he barely works hard to protect the so-called family that he likes his will is so weak like one little thing can happen and it'll change his whole mood to where he'll stop training for a long time he's so weak. It's not even funny without the mangekyo Sharingan he'd probably be at the level of iruka you made him so dumb and reading the story felt kind of off-putting for some reason like it doesn't feel like Naruto it feels more like an American drama show and it gets more obvious when I keep on reading this just doesn't feel right but overall it's okay if you're into these kinds of stories the writing quality is good and updates are frequent character development is beyond atrocious character design is bland World background is pretty good overall ill still probably keep on reading this I don't enjoy it

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