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utter_curiosityLv42yr
2022-08-01 22:08

I have no issues with the writing .. it's just Mc feels pathetic to me he doesn't have motivation which puts a huge dent to the story.. could have been great if Mc is motivated, but I'd still read it because the writing is good, hope mc develops some motivation. .. at ch 16

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MilexKor
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Thanks for the feedback. The big controversy that I've noticed so far from the different feedback is about the MC. And I agree with those who do not like him. It's obvious why by reading the story. However, for me it's also what set him apart from other type of MCs. And it would be interesting to see how he develops.

Raume
RaumeLv11

the problem is that the MC has already gone through many close calls and still you don't develop his character, the number of contradictions is exaggerated, I really like the concept of your novel, but I feel that you are delaying the character development too much, it's not that it is fast or slow because of the number of episodes, it is slow because it has already had many close calls and in none of it does it develop, what is more, it is even more self-conscious, reality has already struck too many times, I say all this because it seriously seems like a good fic, I understand the importance of character development, but it's killing the fic, I wouldn't mind if he remained passive for another 30 episodes, but that would be if he hadn't had so many reality checks.

MilexKor:Thanks for the feedback. The big controversy that I've noticed so far from the different feedback is about the MC. And I agree with those who do not like him. It's obvious why by reading the story. However, for me it's also what set him apart from other type of MCs. And it would be interesting to see how he develops.
Cuteness_preacher9
Cuteness_preacher9Lv14

but I don't think you understand a person who goes through trauma doesn't immediately recover say what you will but he is going through so much trauma people don't just automatically go "oh yeah I have to work harder" when a giant fox has murdered their dad in front of them and the image is literally burned into their memories he is traumatised and acts like a real person does you want a machine but this mc is merely human

Raume:the problem is that the MC has already gone through many close calls and still you don't develop his character, the number of contradictions is exaggerated, I really like the concept of your novel, but I feel that you are delaying the character development too much, it's not that it is fast or slow because of the number of episodes, it is slow because it has already had many close calls and in none of it does it develop, what is more, it is even more self-conscious, reality has already struck too many times, I say all this because it seriously seems like a good fic, I understand the importance of character development, but it's killing the fic, I wouldn't mind if he remained passive for another 30 episodes, but that would be if he hadn't had so many reality checks.
Bilal_Amrani
Bilal_AmraniLv4

then it was better if he wasnt a reincarnator

MilexKor:Thanks for the feedback. The big controversy that I've noticed so far from the different feedback is about the MC. And I agree with those who do not like him. It's obvious why by reading the story. However, for me it's also what set him apart from other type of MCs. And it would be interesting to see how he develops.
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finalgetsuga
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So I've been reading this for a while now I'm on chapter 27 or so and I feel like it's time I write a review on this firstly my issues with this is the main character and his family especially the mom like she's so unlikable you expect me to care for her but you made her so unlikeable that I'm hoping she dies when it should be the opposite she makes dumb decisions like I don't even Care that she had to leave the clan compound because she knew what she did was wrong and she hid it too and basically makes this dumb mc work extra hard to make money for the family even though he's technically just a child and all the bad things happening to them is due to her selfishness, now that I'm done with the mom let's talk about our idiot main character sure he doesn't know all the clues and stuff and doesn't remember everything from Naruto but he knows that the clan will be killed off in a couple of years yet he barely works hard to protect the so-called family that he likes his will is so weak like one little thing can happen and it'll change his whole mood to where he'll stop training for a long time he's so weak. It's not even funny without the mangekyo Sharingan he'd probably be at the level of iruka you made him so dumb and reading the story felt kind of off-putting for some reason like it doesn't feel like Naruto it feels more like an American drama show and it gets more obvious when I keep on reading this just doesn't feel right but overall it's okay if you're into these kinds of stories the writing quality is good and updates are frequent character development is beyond atrocious character design is bland World background is pretty good overall ill still probably keep on reading this I don't enjoy it

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