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GodJinh
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2022-09-06 15:33

The story is mediocre at best. Mc is too much of a coward, doing nothing but being paranoid of things that hadn't happened yet. He also doesn't use his time better like taking long term missions and use it to train his mangekyo sharingan and even his awakening of it was wriiten in a bad way. It felt forced especially since he didn't even use it for that much. He could've done so much more like saving shisui or even his father. So much plot holes that doesn't make sense. Shisui's death was my last straw and overall plunged the quality of the novel. Hope this gets a rewrite

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TrolFaze
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It's just garbage, throw it away

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finalgetsuga
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So I've been reading this for a while now I'm on chapter 27 or so and I feel like it's time I write a review on this firstly my issues with this is the main character and his family especially the mom like she's so unlikable you expect me to care for her but you made her so unlikeable that I'm hoping she dies when it should be the opposite she makes dumb decisions like I don't even Care that she had to leave the clan compound because she knew what she did was wrong and she hid it too and basically makes this dumb mc work extra hard to make money for the family even though he's technically just a child and all the bad things happening to them is due to her selfishness, now that I'm done with the mom let's talk about our idiot main character sure he doesn't know all the clues and stuff and doesn't remember everything from Naruto but he knows that the clan will be killed off in a couple of years yet he barely works hard to protect the so-called family that he likes his will is so weak like one little thing can happen and it'll change his whole mood to where he'll stop training for a long time he's so weak. It's not even funny without the mangekyo Sharingan he'd probably be at the level of iruka you made him so dumb and reading the story felt kind of off-putting for some reason like it doesn't feel like Naruto it feels more like an American drama show and it gets more obvious when I keep on reading this just doesn't feel right but overall it's okay if you're into these kinds of stories the writing quality is good and updates are frequent character development is beyond atrocious character design is bland World background is pretty good overall ill still probably keep on reading this I don't enjoy it

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