I find the idea of a gamer self-insert into the MCU very interesting. But I couldn't read more than one chapter of this because of the grammar and just how the author put emotion into the story. sure the grammar is understandable but it's bad enough it gives me a headache reading it as there's bad phrasing and grammar mistake in practically every sentence. Then there's how the author shows emotion in the story. example Peter feels sad or Peter says something in a sad tone. I honestly can't stand that. because the author's writing in how the characters should feel instead of describing the characters displaying the emotions the author wants to convey. like if someone wanted to show a character being angry 😡 they do it by having the character yell and cussing at the target of their anger and the author could display them yelling by putting everything in caps example SHUT YOUR PIE HOLE. they're much better ways to show emotion for a character than just writing the emotion the character should feel into the story.

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hero complex the grammar is really bad mc dose not use the gamer system ________________________________________________________________________________

The writing quality is too horrible, the plot doesn't exist, the story development is confusing, the character interaction is unpleasant... and the main problem is that the fanfic seems to be a Chinese cultivation/ xianxian/ wuxia novel .

Mc coincidentally Spiderman's tween. coincidentally meets Batgirl. coincidentally metts X-Men. coincidence, coincidentally happens everything. no story development.

Reveal spoiler

1. I got a dig bick 2. You that read wrong 3. You read it wrong also 4. You checked 5. You smiled 7. You are wondering why you still reading this 8. You see the mistake right? (on7) 10. But did you see I skipped number 6? 10. You checked 11. And saw I doubled number 10 and skipped number 9 13. And did you see I skipped number 2 14. You got tricked 15. But did you see that I skipped number 12 16. You checked and wandered why am I wasting my time on this. (You got tricked)

By chapter 5 he has used the gamer system a total of not at all except to check affection and his titles. Which shows that he would kill himself just to have a 5% chance to save someone else. The grammar is also absolute garbage. By chapter 5 there has been no world building or character design. he was also in a military boot camp for 7 years and he’s supposedly a genius yet his CQC and knife handling are only at trainee.

Grammer isn't great but is readable albeit frustrating. The story itself though is sub par really isn't any action which is disappointing for a mcu/dc fanfic. Then there is the poorly written plot that centers around illogical interactions between mc and just about every female character that seem to almost all have d cup breast for some reason. I wanted to like this but to be honest there isn't anything in this story as it is now to make it even remotely worth the investment of time.