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void_ouroboros
void_ouroborosLv42yr
2022-08-04 14:23

By chapter 5 he has used the gamer system a total of not at all except to check affection and his titles. Which shows that he would kill himself just to have a 5% chance to save someone else. The grammar is also absolute garbage. By chapter 5 there has been no world building or character design. he was also in a military boot camp for 7 years and he’s supposedly a genius yet his CQC and knife handling are only at trainee.

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Xuefang1
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what is your problem.... you want mc to become op in just 5 chapters... well I've already Said grammar is not good for about 10 chapters and after that grammer is improved... and I've already told that this is a slow story...

void_ouroboros
void_ouroborosLv4

Sorry not meaning to be rude when I wrote this, it’s just that I get annoyed when someone has a cheat, knows what it is and it’s unlocked but they basically don’t use it day one or two. The concept of this is good, but I also don’t enjoy reincarnated MCs that have a hero complex. them being a hero, fine but personally if I was reincarnated once I wouldn’t risk my second chance for a stranger.

Xuefang1:what is your problem.... you want mc to become op in just 5 chapters... well I've already Said grammar is not good for about 10 chapters and after that grammer is improved... and I've already told that this is a slow story...
Shirubafokkusuhime
ShirubafokkusuhimeLv15

I don't care about grammar that much as long as it has a good plot, comedy and adventure...

Xuefang1:what is your problem.... you want mc to become op in just 5 chapters... well I've already Said grammar is not good for about 10 chapters and after that grammer is improved... and I've already told that this is a slow story...
void_ouroboros
void_ouroborosLv4

nah, i don't mind if the MC doesn't become OP within even 50 chapters. it's just that he hasn't even really used the gamer system. he could've just looked through all the features that would be great. but he only looked at his status and favorability, that's my problem. logically you should study your cheat to at least see if there are any major differences from the original.

Xuefang1:what is your problem.... you want mc to become op in just 5 chapters... well I've already Said grammar is not good for about 10 chapters and after that grammer is improved... and I've already told that this is a slow story...
void_ouroboros
void_ouroborosLv4

Sup past me

void_ouroboros:nah, i don't mind if the MC doesn't become OP within even 50 chapters. it's just that he hasn't even really used the gamer system. he could've just looked through all the features that would be great. but he only looked at his status and favorability, that's my problem. logically you should study your cheat to at least see if there are any major differences from the original.
void_ouroboros
void_ouroborosLv4

My though on this haven’t changed.

void_ouroboros:Sup past me
void_ouroboros
void_ouroborosLv4

Sup somewhat recent past me, thoughts haven’t changed.

void_ouroboros:My though on this haven’t changed.
mow
mowLv4

What about now?

void_ouroboros:Sup somewhat recent past me, thoughts haven’t changed.
void_ouroboros
void_ouroborosLv4

Sorry for the late reply. Tried reading again, still sucks.

mow:What about now?
void_ouroboros
void_ouroborosLv4

Also, cool profile pic. He’s one of my favorite characters in Tokyo Ghoul.

mow:What about now?
mow
mowLv4

Same, have had this picture for years now. Both him and his weapon are a favorite of mine.

void_ouroboros:Also, cool profile pic. He’s one of my favorite characters in Tokyo Ghoul.
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