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2022-08-11 09:12

The author pat his own back on this one. 😂 So far I have only read it to chapter 57 and I am not impress. I have a lot of patience with grammatical error and mispelling because I know that this is translated on a language that is not local to the author but my man, if you are shooting to make money on a language that is not familiar to you at least use a google to check your grammar. The errors are so blatant that it will drive you nuts! One more thing, I thought asian are good at math? WHY does the calculations on your novel so out of whack?! If you dont know how to add just make it vauge amount like aprroximately, or almost or better yet just dont add anymore. You got the nerve to grade your own work 5 star? Seriously? Fix your errors then I will definitely agree with you. Your stories carry a great potential to become something great but you need to have consistency with your grammars, character persona, and dont do math if you’re not good at it.

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