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2022-08-25 21:33

the whole people don't die thing was a bad gimmick cuz it only comes to bite the mc. while Liam the delusional is able to kill someone day one of his reincarnation. at about 170 I realize that the author lost the plot. Liam and Lucas get so much screen time it's become there story and lith is just an observer. I don't like skipping parts of stories but the author literally put 2 chess games back to back. again Liam and Lucas are getting to much screen time and Liam should be dead by now. I can't honestly keep reading this woth how little of a role the mc plays in his own story.

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SocialHippo
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I am sorry the story disappointed you. Me writing the chess game wasn't a filler, but the actual content related to the main theme of this book. This book has a main theme, which is slice of life, and chess game is a part of it. Same with other chapters like surfing the internet and other things. Liam and Lucas had to be given a bit of screentime for plot purposes and going ahead, they get little to not screentime and it's just Lith doing his things. Anywho, I'd like to thankyou firstly for being kind enough to read this much and support me in this endeavour. I truly thank you from the bottom of my heart. Things aren't perfect and there are some problems with the story and the plot, I don't disagree with you on that. I am learning and trying to improve with those things. Your review is one valuable piece of advice for me and I'll gladly take into consideration with the things you mentioned. Once again, thankyou for taking your time and reading, commenting, as well as reviewing, I truly appreciate it. I hope to see you again someday, preferably in better terms. Much love.

_Dream_God_
_Dream_God_Lv14

I'm likely to return as there aren't that many flaws for me and I have you to see you the author treat any comments negatively. I just need a break for a bit

SocialHippo:I am sorry the story disappointed you. Me writing the chess game wasn't a filler, but the actual content related to the main theme of this book. This book has a main theme, which is slice of life, and chess game is a part of it. Same with other chapters like surfing the internet and other things. Liam and Lucas had to be given a bit of screentime for plot purposes and going ahead, they get little to not screentime and it's just Lith doing his things. Anywho, I'd like to thankyou firstly for being kind enough to read this much and support me in this endeavour. I truly thank you from the bottom of my heart. Things aren't perfect and there are some problems with the story and the plot, I don't disagree with you on that. I am learning and trying to improve with those things. Your review is one valuable piece of advice for me and I'll gladly take into consideration with the things you mentioned. Once again, thankyou for taking your time and reading, commenting, as well as reviewing, I truly appreciate it. I hope to see you again someday, preferably in better terms. Much love.
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Echelon_5
Echelon_5Lv15

Around chp 127. Honestly it started really well and I liked the family stuff, the emotions seem real and thoughtful and the chapters are interesting..... however this takes a major nose-dive in the second volume. it just becomes sooo boring and monotonous, lith literally does nothing for the majority of the time and anything mildly interesting happens to other characters but you dont really care or have any emotional attachment to these people as most are just character traits embodied fully and silly. I understand it's a slice of life and that's fine, but it's a boring slice of life, it's literally saying the actions hes going through beat for beat and that too would be fine but he doesnt ever really do anything interesting it's just going to class, drinking tea and sleeping. even during the capture the flag nothing particularly noteworthy happened. the only characters he interacts with in the academy are his 2 male roommates and flamboyant teacher with no redeemable values who apparently is gonna be apart of the harem (bleghh). oh and another thing is this is a harem slice of life novel during an academy arc and not one female student has been introduced, no shenanigans, nobody that provides some interactions, be it flirting or whatnot, for the mc. yaya I get it your trying 'different' and not have all female characters falling over the mc drooling but to reduce that number to 0 just makes it boring when your trying to be different and 'mature', theres a reason people flock to things like that. all in all good start but dropped off considerably, part of me wants to keep reading to see if it gets good again but I just dont care about reading from so many other ppls perspective when the mc is relegated to being boring and mature with nothing note worthy to do

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Master_Dao
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It's a novel to read only if you really can't find other novels to pass the time. This is the third time that my review has been deleted despite having given a 4 star rating, i will repost my review as many times as necessary because i don't like it when the author deletes reviews that he don't like and leaves what he wants. It's a novel to be considered as a H*ntai or dirty novel, the novel is filled with 95% of Yuri relationships, so you don't need to get attached to any character, we have an MC who is reincarnated in a fantasy world with an ultra powerful mother, but there is nothing unique for this MC, even his talent, genius, training, technique, others have the same, even the system ( another reincarnated character have a system since the beginning of the novel and the MC does acquire the system around chapter 520 which is absolutely useless ) and even when the author has finally done something worthy of an MC and his talent since he skipped the Rank of cultivation from Half-Saint to Saint directly, we get a BS that the MC can no longer cultivate for 100 years because his body does not support the progression, so everyone catches up easily after 100 years and still loses something unique, if you really want to consider an MC for this novel it's his mother, she's a person who does what she wants when she wants and very powerful from the start being at Legendary rank ( A true God ), if she wants, she f**ks with her son or her daughter or both together, if her children are not there, she f**ks with her close friends (she no longer does so since she f**ked with her children) or with her maids, and in the last chapters around 684, she progresses towards a level never seen before ( Infinity Rank, to put it simply, at this rank you can do anything, you are omnipotent and omnipresent at this rank), which is impossible for the real MC of this novel to complete even if we give him billions of years or more, so you can simply consider her as the Female MC in the novel revolves around her ( I doubt she even loves him in a romantic way, but she loves him because he is her child and wants to pamper him, because he has absolutely no way of dominating his mother with his character and his strength if he was not her child ). The only thing that can make you read this novel is S*ut and lemons, but even that is messed up with 95% of Yuri in all relationships, but there are always readers excited for scenes like that and that's it. This is why i ask the new reader to consider it as a dirty novel or H*ntai if you want and to skip chapters in my opinion ( the MC has a Harem of wives, lovers and maids, with Yuri relationships served as milk to a child ) Of course, this is just my personal opinion, but you can read the novel or other reviews from other readers to get an idea.

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