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Mr_Dreamer
Mr_DreamerLv22yr
2022-07-09 14:22

world background and writing quality of this novel is top noch ..alas other than that all things gone tooo much down side after begining of 2nd volume (around 120 chapter or somthing) you who is thinking to read this novel be aware ..yess you will gonna like this novel very much because of mc's character and actions on 1st volume but after that from 2nd volume is allllll LOooosttttt ...at one point it seems author himself forgot how he made mc's character and it will pain to see mc's actions on 2nd volume ...so if you like to see how an alfa intelligent ruthless mc becomes idiot wimp beta side character in 2nd volume of the novel than you can happily start reading now otherwise don't bother with this ...i have droped this after reading 2nd volumes 100 chapters of somthing where mc's idiotic actions are hard to bearable and all focused are got on the Fmc ...author if you are reading this comments do work on mc's character if you don't wanna losse more readers otherwise 🙏

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kassimo
kassimoLv3

I agree I dropped it at chapter 129 I think they are still stuck in that place even after chapter 170

hydraspare
hydraspareLv14

Ah yes, everyone is without flaws. Man has no backing, of course he’s gonna act lowkey. I truly don’t see a point when you say he’s a beta?

hydraspare
hydraspareLv14

They are still in the dream realm to the most recent chapter.

kassimo:I agree I dropped it at chapter 129 I think they are still stuck in that place even after chapter 170
JcnPeng
JcnPengLv15

They are still stuck after chapter 300.

kassimo:I agree I dropped it at chapter 129 I think they are still stuck in that place even after chapter 170
PlebLord
PlebLordLv4

So, you didn't have anything to say when the OP said the MC's character is good in Volume one but becomes awful in Volume two?

hydraspare:Ah yes, everyone is without flaws. Man has no backing, of course he’s gonna act lowkey. I truly don’t see a point when you say he’s a beta?
hydraspare
hydraspareLv14

Nope because I domt see how his character becomes awful.

PlebLord:So, you didn't have anything to say when the OP said the MC's character is good in Volume one but becomes awful in Volume two?
Krist
KristLv3

Please do not listen to this guy, his character does change during the second novel but it all makes sense if you actually finish reading the volume. His character is also not nearly as bad as this guy says. He remains a good character.

Bad_At
Bad_AtLv1

Please explain to me how the main character became an "idiot wimp beta side character"? I see many people say stuff similar to this but without good reason.

hydraspare
hydraspareLv14

Cuz they all think he should be fhe op male lead who cant lose and cant just follow someone else’s idea.

Bad_At:Please explain to me how the main character became an "idiot wimp beta side character"? I see many people say stuff similar to this but without good reason.
v_nolan
v_nolanLv1

after cassie essentially enslaved him we thought he would get revenge on her at least. but not only he didn't but he felt guilty because he lashed out on her. this level of simping is unbearable. especially in contrast with how his character was presented in the beginning. it is insult to the readers.

Bad_At:Please explain to me how the main character became an "idiot wimp beta side character"? I see many people say stuff similar to this but without good reason.
Meow_Sama
Meow_SamaLv12

You asked and got your answer. Please reply to the above comment, author. Lol, don't hide behind another account and reply directly.

Bad_At:Please explain to me how the main character became an "idiot wimp beta side character"? I see many people say stuff similar to this but without good reason.
Wandering_Soul_UwU
Wandering_Soul_UwULv14

Alpha and beta do not exist convey ur thoughts in a more correct way u imbecile. Say rather authoritative instead of alpha or whatever.

laylag145
laylag145Lv15

Even if he wanted to kill her, how would he? I mean, come on? Imagine plotting to assassinate someone with her aspect.

v_nolan:after cassie essentially enslaved him we thought he would get revenge on her at least. but not only he didn't but he felt guilty because he lashed out on her. this level of simping is unbearable. especially in contrast with how his character was presented in the beginning. it is insult to the readers.
laylag145
laylag145Lv15

I admit the beginning and end of volume 2 were bitter pills to swallow, but volume 1 instilled in my some faith in the author’s ability to carry the prose. We clearly have underlying themes about breaking free from inescapable fate. In my opinion, the characters make reasonable decisions given their situations, and I’m willing to see it through to the end.

Emilly_y
Emilly_yLv10

I think everyone who has read many novels understands that the beginning is when the author creates the protagonist's personality and from there the protagonist can evolve or regress, in volume 1 the author still left the protagonist's personality messed up, at the beginning I thought he he was going to be cold, calculating and with a good IQ, then I thought he was going to be more calculating because of school and in the labyrinth all this changes to him being someone who trusts his friends and who wants to change to be someone trustworthy, resolving many traumas and in danger of being betrayed by one of the girls he trusted in the future, which any good reader would know was going to happen after his conversation with Cass. In volume 2 the author got lost, all the description of MC that I did for volume 1 has nothing to do with him in volume 2, he even seems like a new character, as someone said previously he became a real slave in personality, all with scared and afraid of everything, for me the author got too lost in this and on top of that the story was at a snail's pace, from chapter 100 to 120 if I'm not mistaken there were 2 or 3 chapters in which he didn't end up with a monologue of the mistakes he made, I wanted to see more evolution of the character but nothing came of it and it gives me a bad feeling reading this, it feels like I'm stuck in the sand without being able to get out and just continue facing everything as if volume one never happened. And before anyone says that this will change, that this has to happen to the protagonist for him to improve or something like that, then I can only say that the author wrote it in a horrible way and that it probably only changes to resolve this error, if the author He thought this was good for the story, so he lacks a lot of experience as a writer. And to think that this book is being sold on Amazon and that there are a lot of Tiktok fanboys, how can the community sink so low. Ps. The plot and the world were very well created, there was just one huge mistake in the main character that disappointed many people and found it difficult to accept.

Krist:Please do not listen to this guy, his character does change during the second novel but it all makes sense if you actually finish reading the volume. His character is also not nearly as bad as this guy says. He remains a good character.
JayBoneDaddy
JayBoneDaddyLv1

I feel dumber just reading that and the fact that you use "alfa" in your sentences reinforces that you are dumb and your dumbness is infectious

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