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2022-01-16 05:57

This is one of those Y/N fics that only special people like. The overall concept of the story wasn't all that bad, but the execution of it made my head spin. Especially with this first person like view that describes how YOU supposedly experience a scene and stuff rather than the character. Its too alien for me. It's like someone describing their toe nail fetish using your own pov. Because you don't experience the world in their way, and thus don't share it, it becomes an absolute xtremely trippy and dizzying reading experience that feels like you entered a roller coaster just as you got out of the car after a long trip with your motion sickness having acted up, and someone suddenly having pushed you in the front car of some messed up rollarcoaster ride with the excuse it will cure your motion sickness. .. Needless to say, I would not recommend a story from the Y/N pov

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JohnKoenig
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To be honest, I don't understand why so many People seem so put off by it, it's just second Person, not self insert. The Reader isn't the Protagonist of the Story, and if the Reader feels like they are in Azami's position, with the obvious differences of course still being there, then that just means that a connection between the You of the Reader and the You of Azami is successfully forming. Which is kind of the Point someone wants to achieve when writing in second Person.

SUBSCRIBE_MY_LIST
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I don't like wine, even tough the majority of people my age do. Doesn't mean I have to understand why others do or vise versa. Had you labeled this alternative POV best known as Y/N from the start, in the title, top of the summary or first of the tags, i you might have had less clicks, but no complaints. What you did is culturally the equivelent to flashing people your willy in non Western cultures. Naturally, the result is a negative response in comments, reviews, etc. Its like someone pushing explicit LGBTQ+ magazines addressed you your name through your parents mailbox, not because you ordered it, or are interested, but just because people know you like to read in general and genuinely assume that since there's text in them, you would be interested in those magazines too.

JohnKoenig:To be honest, I don't understand why so many People seem so put off by it, it's just second Person, not self insert. The Reader isn't the Protagonist of the Story, and if the Reader feels like they are in Azami's position, with the obvious differences of course still being there, then that just means that a connection between the You of the Reader and the You of Azami is successfully forming. Which is kind of the Point someone wants to achieve when writing in second Person.
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SUBSCRIBE_MY_LISTLv5

Alright fair enough, so it's not called a Y/N story. It just does the same things from a social and cultural perspective that clash with this one. The point I was trying to make, is that when you go a non traditional route, it's considered a common courtesy to point that out so people know what they're getting into. Your POV is one that for many readers clashes in frankly disconcerting ways. Westerners would call a warning to this a trigger warning. By placing a warning that the pov is different, you would have avoided a lot of negative reactions, simply because human nature would avoid the confrontation by not wanting to read it in the first place if they weren't open to it. By not announcing the deviation from the writing norm, and doing something so drastic as this pov change. It's like flashing your goods to a stranger. The knee jerk reaction isn't going to be positive. It will also cause people to respond more badly because they won't go into this forewarned and thus with an open mind. Basically, when doing non traditional stuff, especially things that can be considered confronting such as bringing a pov this close to a person which is non traditional, forewarning / trigger warnings / labels and tags will reduce the amount of negative feedback. Mostly because those who really don't want it, won't read it and those who don't like it alter trying it, won't expend the energy to reply negatively. After all, you forewarned them. That's the point I tried to make. A point, that I point out because you say you don't understand the whys. Simply put its like when writing male x male explicit stuff. If you warn people before hand. There is no problem. If you don't lable it and just tag it as such and just bombshell people with such a 18+ scene, it will be severely shocking. Non traditional pov's are like lgbtq+ content. There is no problem if its clearly indicated. But gets massive backlash when not.

JohnKoenig:To be honest, I don't understand why so many People seem so put off by it, it's just second Person, not self insert. The Reader isn't the Protagonist of the Story, and if the Reader feels like they are in Azami's position, with the obvious differences of course still being there, then that just means that a connection between the You of the Reader and the You of Azami is successfully forming. Which is kind of the Point someone wants to achieve when writing in second Person.
JohnKoenig
JohnKoenigAuthor

Fair enough, I've changed the Name a bit to give a small warning, it just really took me a while to understand your Point, so thank you for the Advice.

SUBSCRIBE_MY_LIST:Alright fair enough, so it's not called a Y/N story. It just does the same things from a social and cultural perspective that clash with this one. The point I was trying to make, is that when you go a non traditional route, it's considered a common courtesy to point that out so people know what they're getting into. Your POV is one that for many readers clashes in frankly disconcerting ways. Westerners would call a warning to this a trigger warning. By placing a warning that the pov is different, you would have avoided a lot of negative reactions, simply because human nature would avoid the confrontation by not wanting to read it in the first place if they weren't open to it. By not announcing the deviation from the writing norm, and doing something so drastic as this pov change. It's like flashing your goods to a stranger. The knee jerk reaction isn't going to be positive. It will also cause people to respond more badly because they won't go into this forewarned and thus with an open mind. Basically, when doing non traditional stuff, especially things that can be considered confronting such as bringing a pov this close to a person which is non traditional, forewarning / trigger warnings / labels and tags will reduce the amount of negative feedback. Mostly because those who really don't want it, won't read it and those who don't like it alter trying it, won't expend the energy to reply negatively. After all, you forewarned them. That's the point I tried to make. A point, that I point out because you say you don't understand the whys. Simply put its like when writing male x male explicit stuff. If you warn people before hand. There is no problem. If you don't lable it and just tag it as such and just bombshell people with such a 18+ scene, it will be severely shocking. Non traditional pov's are like lgbtq+ content. There is no problem if its clearly indicated. But gets massive backlash when not.
M7TH1C
M7TH1CLv14

If this was on wattpad people wouldn't complain but different sites have different preferences.

JohnKoenig:To be honest, I don't understand why so many People seem so put off by it, it's just second Person, not self insert. The Reader isn't the Protagonist of the Story, and if the Reader feels like they are in Azami's position, with the obvious differences of course still being there, then that just means that a connection between the You of the Reader and the You of Azami is successfully forming. Which is kind of the Point someone wants to achieve when writing in second Person.
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