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AinzO0alGown
AinzO0alGownLv142yr
2022-01-10 17:25

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Apollyon Game of Thrones Fanfiction [Written in Second Person]

JohnKoenig
3.5
102 Chs

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JohnKoenig
JohnKoenigAuthor

Thank you for your Review anyways, Ainz.

2yr
AinzO0alGown
AinzO0alGownLv14

The story is great but why this POV do you have something against the readers I hate to see this it's a shame such a good fic turn out bad just because of this

JohnKoenig:Thank you for your Review anyways, Ainz.
2yr
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JohnKoenig
JohnKoenigAuthor

The Game of Thrones World is a rather large one, and we are simply following Azami for however long she will be in this World. I choose this way of telling the Story because it does that one thing, the following of Azami's Journey, rather well. I'm trying to guaranty that we will have one solid feeling throughout the Story so that even if you're fifty Chapters in, and Azami will be fighting her first Campaigns or something, it won't suddenly feel like you're reading a different Story. If you really can't come to enjoy my writing-style, but still care about the Story itself then there would be a Link in the Description to a Youtube Video I made, It's the first with the others following as the Story progresses, and contains the Chapters one to five. Perhaps if you don't have to read the Story, the POV won't be quite as annoying.

AinzO0alGown:The story is great but why this POV do you have something against the readers I hate to see this it's a shame such a good fic turn out bad just because of this
2yr
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CopyPaste1
CopyPaste1Lv13

Lad i read the first chapter, well it felt like somone in your story seeing the world from OUR eyes. It felt like WE the readers was there and not your Mc It felt like your Mc give a summary of My story.

JohnKoenig:The Game of Thrones World is a rather large one, and we are simply following Azami for however long she will be in this World. I choose this way of telling the Story because it does that one thing, the following of Azami's Journey, rather well. I'm trying to guaranty that we will have one solid feeling throughout the Story so that even if you're fifty Chapters in, and Azami will be fighting her first Campaigns or something, it won't suddenly feel like you're reading a different Story. If you really can't come to enjoy my writing-style, but still care about the Story itself then there would be a Link in the Description to a Youtube Video I made, It's the first with the others following as the Story progresses, and contains the Chapters one to five. Perhaps if you don't have to read the Story, the POV won't be quite as annoying.
2yr
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JohnKoenig
JohnKoenigAuthor

Nikos please read my reply again. I'm sure you will see that I said that we are following her Journey nothing about how we do it.

CopyPaste1:Lad i read the first chapter, well it felt like somone in your story seeing the world from OUR eyes. It felt like WE the readers was there and not your Mc It felt like your Mc give a summary of My story.
2yr
Pythia
PythiaLv11

yeah dude said it

CopyPaste1:Lad i read the first chapter, well it felt like somone in your story seeing the world from OUR eyes. It felt like WE the readers was there and not your Mc It felt like your Mc give a summary of My story.
2yr
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AndellOfficial
AndellOfficialLv13

Honestly you should delete these kind of reviews. It's like one starring a Nobel because it's in Spanish; ridiculous, unhelpful to people wanting to read, and a complete lack of criticism so you might know where your weaknesses in writing are.

JohnKoenig:Nikos please read my reply again. I'm sure you will see that I said that we are following her Journey nothing about how we do it.
2yr
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Sindura
SinduraLv13

Hey Author, I know what you wanted to do with this perspective but that is not how the second person perspective is used. Showing the world from your MC's perspective would be done in first person, then it would be like the MC telling us her story. The second person is used for making the reader a character in your story. Even third person would have been better at what you are trying to do than this...

JohnKoenig:The Game of Thrones World is a rather large one, and we are simply following Azami for however long she will be in this World. I choose this way of telling the Story because it does that one thing, the following of Azami's Journey, rather well. I'm trying to guaranty that we will have one solid feeling throughout the Story so that even if you're fifty Chapters in, and Azami will be fighting her first Campaigns or something, it won't suddenly feel like you're reading a different Story. If you really can't come to enjoy my writing-style, but still care about the Story itself then there would be a Link in the Description to a Youtube Video I made, It's the first with the others following as the Story progresses, and contains the Chapters one to five. Perhaps if you don't have to read the Story, the POV won't be quite as annoying.
1yr
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SUBSCRIBE_MY_LIST
SUBSCRIBE_MY_LISTLv5

This is one of those Y/N fics that only special people like. The overall concept of the story wasn't all that bad, but the execution of it made my head spin. Especially with this first person like view that describes how YOU supposedly experience a scene and stuff rather than the character. Its too alien for me. It's like someone describing their toe nail fetish using your own pov. Because you don't experience the world in their way, and thus don't share it, it becomes an absolute xtremely trippy and dizzying reading experience that feels like you entered a roller coaster just as you got out of the car after a long trip with your motion sickness having acted up, and someone suddenly having pushed you in the front car of some messed up rollarcoaster ride with the excuse it will cure your motion sickness. .. Needless to say, I would not recommend a story from the Y/N pov

2yr

JohnKoenig
JohnKoenigAuthor

Hello there, John is my name, and as you know, I'm the author, and I'm writing this little review to clarify a few points. Firstly, the matter of capitalisation errors, you will continue to see them in future chapters, but they will later be rectified in a second more polished version of this story. Secondly, the matter of the story being written in second person, that won't change, but perhaps you can have more fun if you simply imagine it like your GM narrating a past D&D session to you. And thirdly, I ask that you honestly think about your ratings, people that give one star because they think the overall rating is too high aren't much better than people spamming five-star reviews. And with that, I wish all of you much fun with my story. :D

2yr
Charlie_Sowern
Charlie_SowernLv3

If this was in a normal POV, it would have been interesting ..................................................................... ..........

2yr
Meowerz
MeowerzLv12

The POV is actually fine, yes it's weird if you're unfamiliar with it but you get used to it as you read on. For the capitalization, it's easy to ignore and well, would you rather have this than horrendous grammar. For the OPness of the main character, I'm fine with it. I actually quite like the sense of slice of life that this provides rather than the 'grind' for more abilities. Although I would like more interactions with the other characters such as her parents or her siblings.

2yr
Nxgen_Snail_Kota
Nxgen_Snail_KotaLv1

I'm sure there is a decent story to be told here, and I'm willing to bet the author put a moderate amount of time and effort into writing and editing it but the 2nd person pov is a complete turn-off. This type of book would probably do a lot better on Wattpad where stories told in this fashion take up around 35% of the total stories on there.

2yr
Zetsway
ZetswayLv12

I won't say much about the story, but, really, you made a Villain in GoT? There are like, 1 maybe 2 genuinely good people in the whole story and you felt like add another evil one?

2yr
ThePandaCritic
ThePandaCriticLv1

lol, it's funny that people hate or review a low story because it's in the second POV stated in the description. I mean you read at your own risk but why hate when the author was honest up front, this int my cup of tea I don't do female Mc but ill leave a good review just because in the comment section I see you are very courteous to those people.

2yr
Fancy_Baggeute_101
Fancy_Baggeute_101Lv14

The poinT of view is such a pain like The stiry and the idea are really nice but pov is ruining it 😞😞😞😞😞😞

2yr
57843
57843Lv13

I dont mind the PoV, the story is good as well but take it witha grain of salt bcz this narrating style os not for everyone and I am a sucker for villain MC

2yr
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