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2024-11-04 22:28

Wonderful story. I enjoy reading. Only part that could be change. As it doesn’t make sense unless the author trying to do a flashback. The last chapter they had the baby. They were doing things with the baby. However, the first bonus chapter. Is about when they returned to the castle. The baby hasn’t been born yet. Only celebrated. They are waiting. Then the 2nd bonus chapter it’s mention the baby has been born over a year so far. Just feels like at the end of the last chapter about feeding the cake to the baby should’ve been in the bonus chapter since the baby hasn’t been bonus in the 1s bonus chapter. It’s mention in the 2nd bonus chapter.

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