The comedy was good at the start but got annoying real quick with the fourth wall break like 5 times in each chapter. 1-dimensional mc that just kills so he can power up. He doesn't really have a goal in the story either. Just kills people randomly just to be "evil". A few grammatical mistakes, but you can expect it to be free of mistakes so yeah. This is something that you can read if there's nothing else to read. Might have to turn off your brain for the things the mc does.
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exactly you can probably notice as well that this fic was made as it wemt, without a plan or clear goal, so the characters, and their motivations changed from one chap to another though, the 4th wall thing is just my writing style, so I can't really change that
Yeah, I kinda figured that it was because of your style of writing. I made it to chapter 60 and had to take a break from there. I might come back to the story if it gets finished (a very rare case).
Joao132135:exactly you can probably notice as well that this fic was made as it wemt, without a plan or clear goal, so the characters, and their motivations changed from one chap to another though, the 4th wall thing is just my writing style, so I can't really change that
it will, we are in the end game right now and then I need to finish my other fics, and finally make some fics with a plan in mind now, if you want a good fic to read, you can probably check out my readimg lists, there are lots of (In my personal opinion) very good fics there, see if you find something that you like
xxYoungMasterxx:Yeah, I kinda figured that it was because of your style of writing. I made it to chapter 60 and had to take a break from there. I might come back to the story if it gets finished (a very rare case).
I will stay tuned for whatever story your making as long as you have a plan for it and its at least 20 to 30 chps long because you seem like a good writer you just need to have a plan.
Joao132135:it will, we are in the end game right now and then I need to finish my other fics, and finally make some fics with a plan in mind now, if you want a good fic to read, you can probably check out my readimg lists, there are lots of (In my personal opinion) very good fics there, see if you find something that you like
normally I have a plan then I pass the planned part and everything falls apart then later on, I put everything back togheter with a new plan then future me will have to rewrite the middle of my fics but that's his problem, not mine
Scott_Asmind:I will stay tuned for whatever story your making as long as you have a plan for it and its at least 20 to 30 chps long because you seem like a good writer you just need to have a plan.
Joao132135:normally I have a plan then I pass the planned part and everything falls apart then later on, I put everything back togheter with a new plan then future me will have to rewrite the middle of my fics but that's his problem, not mine
that's the plan
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