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Nicolas_BahamondesLv22yr
2022-10-22 10:20

good idea horrible development the protagonist jumps from an oppressed and abandoned child to a pervert with theft syndrome Despite being the reincarnation of an op mage, with two super tricked-out weapons, he always stays out of the fight. and the development with the harem is typical of I have you I look for another looks like a bad chinese story

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Drurlulu
DrurluluLv13

really? I've only remembered 4 full fights because I haven't read that far and that's counting battling scathach and the mc doesn't really back off into a corner, when he's fighting a dragon for the first time he used his sacred gear and fought it head to head iirc, and when he fought it using ascalon iirc? although that's the only fights I remember it seems to me that mc fights back.

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Boroxx
BoroxxLv11

As much as i would like to like this novel since i realy love all the worlds the mc has been to and will go to but i just realy cant. Its sad to say that IMO this novel is perfect, as long as you edit out the MC and basicly everything the MC has done in this novel. Lets start with the first and the most annoying thing with the MC for me is that the MC is Zelretch's reincarnation and has all the memories except the ones about ORT and all the plans related to it, this would have been fine, great even as i personaly love nasuverse magic as a perfect mix of flashy explosions and mysterious concept magic HOWEVER for some reason all the mcs knowledge of said magic is COMPLETELY ignored by the author outside of the second magics ability to teleport and empower his avarage swordsmanship to the point where it can fight heroic spirits... LIKE THE F dude, some of the most powerful magic in the second dimension completely degraded to travel tool+swordsmanship assist, i mean you hold what is basicly the key to space but all its used for is chopping people like a mindless berserker and failing as i cant remember the mcs "birds" has ever actualy harmed anyone even those significantly weaker than him. Not to mention any other magic Zelretch could/should have possessed as with his age he should have atleast have a solid basic in every magical discipline and a complete master in those he focuses on like jewelcraft wich literaly involves his title old man of the jewels and mystic code creation with the kaleidosticks, but nope, nothing at all, the story would have been 100% better off if it was just a "mc reincarnated in dxd with the ability to travel between worlds" fic as thats the only thing while extremely stretched that could be a ability Zelretch would have as while mentioned that the mc has Zelretch's knowledge however it is completely ignored after like the first 2 chapters in the story and has never basicly never been used after that as the MC fully focuses on runes and omnyoji. Like what is the point of being a reincarnation of Zelretch if the mc doesnt use any magic or ability that could be linked back to Zelretch at all. But all this while incredibly frustrating it is possible to ignore as long as you simply "delete" the fact that the MC possesses all of Zelretch's knowledge from your mind and just continue reading. BUT... then theres the big but, what makes this novel frustrating to the point of me wanting to tear my hairs out if the character of BOTH the MC and the Author. The MC is obnoxious, like extremely. He acts extremely disgusting to every female sentient being he meets and for some reason all women instantly get together with him and even seem to like his obnoxious character, i mean, i as a 27 year old male feel disgusted by his blatant sexual harasment and constant staring at female privates so how could every female he meets be happy with it? While lovers might be flattered by doing so but for random strangers thats a good way to get a restraining order. And for the MCs character the Author just tries too hard to make it "reasonable" that it has become anything but. Almost every action the MC takes is driven by a negative personality trait he possesses, and every other chapter the Author has to mention his Devil/Dragon traits to make excuses for his actions, i mean, cant the mc just do something just because he wants to? He always has to stare at this butt because his devil nature and always has to hoard that artifact because his dragon nature blahblah, the author is trying so hard that the mc has nothing but his devil/dragon traits for him to even get out of bed in the morning. Now the absolutely worst of the worst is that the Author has a hard one for a weak MC. The mc is incredibly powerful and knowledgeable but the Author always forces the MC to be in the weakest position possible in a fight going as far as literaly twisting black and white and distorting the facts to the extreme, with this i mean if the MC is a ultimate class devil on a normal day then the next day when the mc fights a high class evil then the mc would suddenly only be a mid class devil and if the day after that the mc would have to fight a super devil then the mc would be a demon king class devil... This is not even mentioning that all his powers are used the absolute worst way imagineable as being a powerful mage with powerful magic and knowledge he rushes head first with a sword while only possessing mediocore swordsmanship that has to be suplemented by the second magic just to be able to match true martial artist types and while using the boosted gear doing nothing but screaming and punching like a mindless berserker while he is actualy a mage and can boost his magic to terifying degrees, and even a sword would have a much better effect than mindlessly throwing punches like a commong street thug, i mean seriously? what is more likely to win the fight? punching someone or chopping off someones head? All in all, after a long rant and venting my frustration and hairloss brought by this promising yet utterly dissapointing story... READ THIS if you like a underdog MC who never grows and always stays 1 step behind his enemies in both strenght and wisdom and has to struggle all the way even if he has long since outgrown said enemy. DO NOT READ THIS if you hate a weak MC that will never grow stronger and has a overall rather obnoxious character that makes him look like a xianxia MC without self will. And a Author who completely twists black and white and falls into the same pitfalls over and over again with his underdog MC fetish.

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