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2023-12-16 10:30

my big gripe with the story is that it feels like a series of notes, or like you're watching a movie and it's just characters standing in a room while the narrator tells you what *would* be happening if it was a movie. there's a big rule of "show don't tell" in fiction and it's usually to avoid situations like this, it feels very "heavy" on the mind to just read chapter after chapter of expository paragraphs about a bunch of background information especially when it doesn't mean anything to us yet. we were introduced to a family of dragons, their names, histories, size, powers, relationship dynamics etc then they just got thrown away because "no this new guy is the mc". we got introduced to a void in space with these realm trees, spread out across the sky and glowing, a big empty space as the location for the novel, then it got deleted because "no actually were going over here to this heaven place instead". then we had to go through the whole process of exposition dumps for the people who mattered again, it feels like a burger wrapped in 4 layers of packaging, inside a sealed bag, placed in a locked chest, hidden in a wardrobe. even if it's our favourite thing ever the price is too high. you have to study and study chapters and chapters of homework just to get into this novel and I genuinely had to put my tablet down a few times to give myself time to relax from it all.

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DMadLord
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😂 sorry about that. GREED can be very difficult to read through.

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Alignment: Neutral Evil Final Score: 3.5 DISCLAIMERS: The rating given is my own opinion of the novel at this time. And may be subject to change later. The rating given is relative to the material on this site. Meaning a 4 or 5 given on Webnovel is not a 4 or 5 given on Amazon. ----------------------------- "A Diamond in The Rough" Few stories are able to capture their readers. Whether that be through its excellent plot, characters, or world-building (There are some freaks of nature that manage to capture all three). Unfortunately this is not one of those stories. There are periods in the novel that seem utterly benign. The author seems to be desperately eager to share all their wonderful ideas for the world and its power-system. However, this process is neither gradual nor subtle. It's akin to drinking water from a firehose. The info-dumping is simply terrible. It's info dump after info dump, words and sentences that string along together that make coherent sense but aren't meaningful in any way to the reader. At times I can't be bothered to care for any of the characters in the novel, including the protagonist. Simply because we don't spend meaningful time with him at all. It's constant P.O.V changes and lore/world building that's taking up the precious time of the main character. The protagonist is supposed to be the catalyst that brings the world building and other characters into play. At times I feel frustrated with this, at times I wish to no longer waste my time, at times I feel like forgetting about this novel forever....... ------------------------------------------------- Is how I previously felt about this novel. Before a certain point in the story I felt tired of this novel and had serious misgivings. But the author seems to have listed to the criticisms, and made some changes. They started to put more effort into telling the story of the MC! There were moments in this novel that were genuinely exciting to read, but I was always overwhelmed by the info-dumping. However now since the author made the necessary changes, the readability of the story has increased by at least two-fold. There are still info-dumps but they're more manageable and do not get in the way of the MC's journey. ------------------------------------------ The world of "Greed: All For What" is vast. The power system is both simple yet complex (in a good way). There are clear denominations, and each stage is given it's own unique trait. However, there are unique ways in which one can find loopholes (or exploits) in order to gain more power. Our MC's cheat is practically based on finding this exploit. ------------------------------------------ The protagonist is simply a breath of fresh air compared to the generic cultivation mc template. This guy is willing to do whatever it takes to reach his goals. If he needs to sacrifice someone or something he's willing to do so. However, there are very few moments where the MC is willing to prove his "dao" so to speak. When they do pop-up in the novel they're always a treat. There are times when the MC is overshadowed, and relegated to a minor role in the story. Nevertheless, the author seems to have learned their lesson and made efforts to make these occurrences few and far between. --------------------------------------------- The author's work ethic and discipline are truly commendable. They release on a daily basis, and sometimes twice a day. ------------------------------------------- What I would like to see in the future: 1. More "Dao Affirming" Moments. I want to see the reason why there's an evil mc tag. 2. More dialogue would help (although finding the right balance may prove difficult). -------------------------- Overall: This story suffers greatly due to the excessive information dump that impedes the protagonist's journey. However, underneath all that is a story worth telling. In my humble opinion, I think others should read this story. There is a soul here, and the author is very passionate and willing to change. Despite the author's mistakes, this story is worth reading as long as the author never loses his way.

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