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STOLEN_kingLv12yr
2022-07-14 17:31

When I first read the synopsis I was happy, as it is rare to find a book where the MC is not either dicking around with diff girls or being hella overpowered. But well it disappointed me, the first 4 chapters of yours they are very boring. I do know that you might have wanted to explain the world's background but you could've taken a diff approach. All I am trying to say even though your story might be amazing or the idea behind is amazing, the way you put it in the words was a little Disappointing.

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DMadLordAuthor

Thanks for your opinion. I really appreciate it. How many chapters of my work have you read? I'll like to know what you think about the rest.

NewfoundBladeLv1

How many ch do I need to skip before he starts his plan

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