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Spelloyal
SpelloyalLv122yr
2021-11-17 03:27

The fanfic is interesting and well written, but it has a really annoying problem that made me give it 3 stars. The mc is a slave to the system, he cannot refuse any missions and they all have absurd failure punishments like eternal virginity, loss of status and death, death and more death. It's okay if the missions were optional, or if the punishments were something fun but not really harmful like becoming a woman for a day, all food tastes bad for a week, itchy and so on. But no, all punishments are absurd at the level that if the mc fails a mission he could very well end up dying or with irreversible/serious long term consequences. I won't drop it as it's all very well written and interesting, but I won't improve my grade as long as the mc remains a slave either.

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ORION_4144
ORION_4144Lv14

I_Love_Hina
I_Love_HinaLv13

Sooo.... what about now?

Goldenswiftreader
GoldenswiftreaderLv5

It was a low grade system wish so the harshness actually makes sense.

Spelloyal
SpelloyalLv12

This is not a low grade system, it is a slavery grade system. feels more like a punishment than a reward

Goldenswiftreader:It was a low grade system wish so the harshness actually makes sense.
7350Ledger
7350LedgerLv3

but dude this fanfic comidy is too notch

Spelloyal:This is not a low grade system, it is a slavery grade system. feels more like a punishment than a reward
BAD_MAN
BAD_MANLv5

Lol he deserve it for being annoying and dumb idiot in the beginning.

MonkeResurrection
MonkeResurrectionLv2

Well why does he deserve it?

BAD_MAN:Lol he deserve it for being annoying and dumb idiot in the beginning.
BAD_MAN
BAD_MANLv5

read chapter 1-2 you will see

MonkeResurrection:Well why does he deserve it?
YukiShiro55
YukiShiro55Lv11

is there any romance? harem or just signal paring?

BAD_MAN:read chapter 1-2 you will see
BAD_MAN
BAD_MANLv5

idk if this is harem but I think the romance is emilia from The devil is part timer.

YukiShiro55:is there any romance? harem or just signal paring?
Dasksd2
Dasksd2Lv4

to the point it gets annoying and he has sakuras around him😑

YukiShiro55:is there any romance? harem or just signal paring?
Reincarnation_God
Reincarnation_GodLv13

is it bad that I would rather be a virgin for eternity than be a woman

Spelloyal
SpelloyalLv12

I think it's weird that you'd prefer that to being a woman for a day, but that's okay. What would be absurd is to prefer to die. Preferring to be a virgin than a woman for life would make more sense

Reincarnation_God:is it bad that I would rather be a virgin for eternity than be a woman
MrIIIo
MrIIIoLv5

He meant being a women for a day, the humoric kind of punishments which don’t have serious concequences but suck anyway

Spelloyal:I think it's weird that you'd prefer that to being a woman for a day, but that's okay. What would be absurd is to prefer to die. Preferring to be a virgin than a woman for life would make more sense
Kono_phineas_da
Kono_phineas_daLv2

I completely agree the comedy is so good it overshadows any issues

7350Ledger:but dude this fanfic comidy is too notch
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MlsZ132
MlsZ132Lv4

if you think about, power never comes for free so it seems to me that those kjnd of punishments make it more realistic. at least to me

Spelloyal
SpelloyalLv12

The problem is that these punishments were valid for all quests and the quests are mandatory. Improves over time, now instead of death he loses skills if he fails

MlsZ132:if you think about, power never comes for free so it seems to me that those kjnd of punishments make it more realistic. at least to me
HadesChampion
HadesChampionLv4

yeah the system is trash. no basic stuff like exercising which the mc needs . the mc is very childish for a supposed adult soul , and the fact the mc is creepy to everyone even with a normal body stat. the mc being repulsive to everyone killed my interest

Spelloyal
SpelloyalLv12

As I recall he wasn't an adult, but it's been a long time so I could be wrong. Honestly the story improves with time and gets more interesting. The system also improves, but still has a smaller problem of force missions (punishments have become more reasonable). Another problem is how the MC never fails any mission, this is kind of weird. The only factor that discourages reading in the more recent chapters is the uncertain release schedule along with the long hiatus zem warning it has had in the past, it worries me about the future of the fanfic.

HadesChampion:yeah the system is trash. no basic stuff like exercising which the mc needs . the mc is very childish for a supposed adult soul , and the fact the mc is creepy to everyone even with a normal body stat. the mc being repulsive to everyone killed my interest
Genn_stars
Genn_starsLv3

I would lose my virginity both as male and female. h*ntai makes it look kinda good.

Reincarnation_God:is it bad that I would rather be a virgin for eternity than be a woman
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