I’ve read 23 chapters of the current release and I’m giving it a rating of 3.1/5, but I’ll bump it up to 5 to encourage the author. Overall, it’s a story about a powerful, overpowered MC who is reincarnated in HP world after devouring some souls and is sent to guide Harry Potter against the evil Dumbledore. The story is dense at the beginning, but it improves after chapter 6. One of the main weaknesses in the narrative is the characters, They are very square in their role in the script, without a three-dimensionality to make them more interesting with one or two episodes, this is accentuated in the MC's interactions, and as if there were a tag that predefines the MC's treatment of a character. He can even find one of these pre-allies and reveal secrets that would literally kill him, this before getting to know them or having enough interactions to build trust. The mc personality tends to overshadow other characters in dialogues and actions, making it seem as though he lives in a world where everyone is just an extension of himself. Regarding world-building, there are original scenes outside of Hogwarts, but they are generally predictable and have been explored in many fanfics. As for the writing, it’s decent—you shouldn’t have much trouble understanding or enjoying it. That’s my general perspective. I hope you continue to write and improve your skills!
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Thanks for the review! I will continue to try to improve. And hey, at least I gave warnings in the description. Have a good one :)
You just some experience and everything wil be fine.
