Lozz

I like the pacing, although there is a little too much description for my taste. You have mentioned, repeatedly, that the tactics have been drilled and honed until it's second nature and the same with individual characters. At some point it feels a little like padding out the paragraph reminding us again what we already know. That's just me though. Loving the story so far!

Plus the comprehension perk would be useful for everything, including his progress as a warrior and his goal of becoming a sword-singer. Forget what it's called right now.

The restoration buff would be useful, yeah. And I did see the alteration affinity. The thing is, he could achieve all of that with study/hard work, which is inline with your story. Adding a divine intervention in the form of a class feels like a blow to that philosophy. My opinion is you should give him another perk here and get him to choose the comprehension one he could've chosen in the last selection. It would speed him up in everything and give him all the advantages that this class would give through hard work and study, which is in line with your story. It would take away the restoration buff, but that could be given by a divine blessing for actions done during the war if you wanted it. I have no doubt you can pull this whole class thing off, but it detracts from the theme so far. You do you though. I'll still read it like I said. Good luck.

I don't mind the nerf of the save/reload system. It's a little incomprehensible due to the conversation with Mara at the beginning of the story, but I can accept that. Adding classes in though... that really put me off. One of Skyrim's biggest draws is that there is no set class. This story is something truly special so far, and I'm loving it. Adding in something like class modifiers... it makes sense in your story as his system was given to him by the divines, but I, personally, hate this idea. A lot. Plus, you just released a chapter yesterday focusing on his passion for alteration magic, and now he's thinking of choosing the healer class? That's why I'm semi-convinced this is an april-fools chapter. Keep going as you were. Your story's amazing! Add a nerf to the save/reload feature to give him more pressure during the war if you want to. But please re-think this class thing. It's shoehorning the MC into a box or archetype where right now he can develop in the direction he chooses without this whole class thing. Maybe you could pull it off. Maybe. You're a good writer after all. If you decide to go with it, i'll still read your story, but i'm not gonna lie and say my interest won't decrease. Just my opinion tho. In the end it's your story, i'm just pleading you here to not go that route.

This better be an april fools chapter. Pls let it be so.

TFTC

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He won't be a loner edgelord, dont worry. I wouldn't want my character to be like that either. Many people commented that they want that, but ive ignored them all and will continue ignoring them.

Also, no. I don't have a timeframe.

I have as well and I can agree that it's one of the better ones on this platform, but there are many stories that are better, espeicially on FF.net - I want my fanfic to be good. I dont have the skills to write a masterpiece, but I want it to be better than average. Right now, I would classify mine as average.