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Bierbart
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2021-10-02 23:45

Writing quality is good. The start and concept was interesting. sadly the mc and the story developement ruins it. Overfriendly i have to pay back social debts kind of mc. Add to that bad battles. Story might be interesting for people with a lighter and younger taste or for children

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I do love dungeon master novels and am happy you chose the genre that said either people are stupid or reading the wrong novel cause this doesnt even deserve 1 star. Mc is naive, extremely stupid to the point its cringe, and a massive hypocrite. Could barely go past chapter 3. 1. How has he never injured himself in the cave hes visited for years. 2. His love for an orphanage that took him in because its the literal job of the orphanage is cringe and to the point of fanatic that its unrealistic, sure maybe they were super nice but its their job. ok sure this isnt that bad but its annoying and cringe as heck to see him beg for some money and cry like a baby cause he apparently "needs to support his orphanage" which is literally government funded and he should be paying for food and rent which is a much better excuse cause thats not how a normal person would react or pay their debt its stupid. 3. Grammar is eh 4. Mc is hypocrite, kills wolfs, sees wolf leader has kid, so kills their enemies to protect wolf leader. why? because he has a kid?!?! One, the wolf leader and you were enemies until the second you saw they had a kid and the enemies you kill have kids also you oaf and you have no relation to either party, completely forced by author. 5. I hate harems, but i wont let that affect my review because thats a category not a writing flaw. However why do you people need to ruin novels with dungeon masters and recruiting so much, if you want a harem thats fine, but not almost every single monster recruited needs to be a girl for the sake of harem, throw some guys in that arent antagonists or extras. For those who love harems, thats your choice but i will say its better to not put a harem in a novel as a majority of the webnovel readerbase hates anything harem related and most of those who read harems still read books without harems so if you want more readers dont do harem or little sisters. Little sisters makes 90% of readers drop a novel just seeing any words that state mc has a little sister those that stay just hope she dies so they can read in peace. 6. theres more but im too lazy.

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