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BreathOfSin
BreathOfSinLv133yr
2021-08-29 13:52

Grammar is basically bad and the excuse of It's my third language doesn't really work as english is my third language too but I'm still pretty good at it. Updates come daily. I didn't really like story development as I don't like mixed anime world, In the first few chapters MC literally mocked shouya but he still continued to be polite and even became MC's friend? No way that I would become a friend of someone who started mocking my several seconds after we met. Character design is subpar for some characters while others are so-so, Example: Shouya would get angry straight away if someone called him short, Kakashi wouldn't be so calm afterall there's no such thing as smartphone in his time, he wouldn't be able to write straight away either. World background is a mess (Mainly because of many different world mixed in), but acceptable I guess.

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Riku_Wing
Riku_WingLv10

I'm sorry if I criticize you. Let me explain, the first time the author wrote grammar was a bit messy and even the author was confused because he was a native Indonesian. I as a reader advise the author of an application "Grammarly Keyboard - English Grammar Assistant" so he can make it easier for writers. So the problem is where lies the bad grammar?

BreathOfSin
BreathOfSinLv13

I guess more people agree with me than you

Riku_Wing:I'm sorry if I criticize you. Let me explain, the first time the author wrote grammar was a bit messy and even the author was confused because he was a native Indonesian. I as a reader advise the author of an application "Grammarly Keyboard - English Grammar Assistant" so he can make it easier for writers. So the problem is where lies the bad grammar?
Riku_Wing
Riku_WingLv10

I don't care about you.

BreathOfSin:I guess more people agree with me than you
DarkKnight32
DarkKnight32Lv6

Grammarly does help a bit but to use it's full potential you still have to know the language quite well. When i used there app they helped me use different varieties of the same word so that my peregrafs don't seem that repetitive. Though right now i can still see some mistakes i even deleted my first story from embarrassment.😅

Riku_Wing:I'm sorry if I criticize you. Let me explain, the first time the author wrote grammar was a bit messy and even the author was confused because he was a native Indonesian. I as a reader advise the author of an application "Grammarly Keyboard - English Grammar Assistant" so he can make it easier for writers. So the problem is where lies the bad grammar?
I_Simp_4_Violet
I_Simp_4_VioletLv3

Look at the likes again...

BreathOfSin:I guess more people agree with me than you
BreathOfSin
BreathOfSinLv13

Dude, something is seriously wrong with you, my whole notification section is filled with your likes on the same posts.

I_Simp_4_Violet:Look at the likes again...
I_Simp_4_Violet
I_Simp_4_VioletLv3

Oh, that's a prank I use auto-clicker and leave it for 2 mins.🤪

BreathOfSin:Dude, something is seriously wrong with you, my whole notification section is filled with your likes on the same posts.
MonkeMonke
MonkeMonkeLv3

kisses 😘

I_Simp_4_Violet:Oh, that's a prank I use auto-clicker and leave it for 2 mins.🤪
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