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Soun_Phavin
Soun_PhavinLv103yr
2021-07-06 22:58

The world and the synopsis are interesting. I admit that. I've started reading the first chapter and it gives a lot of information in one chapter, it seems confusing and so hard to remember all of the character's names. The grammar and vocabulary are great but the writing needs to be in more detail for the reader to read easier. (Sorry saying this to you when my writing is worse than you, it's my honest opinion as a reader) But one most important thing, yes!! The plot is great and unique. Keep it up and give me more updates, author!!

Jacob Mornings

chimychimes
4.3
4 Chs

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chimychimes
chimychimesAuthor

yup. it's men to be confusing as the character himself is kind of complex- has a complex mix of emotions. so it may take time to build him up🤓🤓🙃🙃🙃

3yr
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chimychimes
chimychimesAuthor

Why don't you come and check it out

3yr
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listen_moon
listen_moonLv1

Amazing plot. 4.6 stars cuz of update stability. I do hope that u will improve. Kiddos to the author ......✌✌✌ I know u will improve. All the best.

3yr

Madyan_wani
Madyan_waniLv10

This book really deserves 5 star I love the story. The way the writer describes story is kinda amazing. I wanna learn from this style. Kudos to the writer. Best of Luck!!

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Kateki
KatekiLv1

The way the story is on a different planet makes it a unique one :) And the hologram gadget is an interesting thing I would say.. looking forward to the further chapters.

3yr
Deborah_Pruijmboom
Deborah_PruijmboomLv2

this story is absolutely out of this world. I have read the first few chapters in one blow. i sure hope the author is writing more chapters, as I want to know how things continue.

3yr
Erfan_Sh
Erfan_ShLv1

Very promising Novel with lots of interesting and engaging plots. The characters keep getting more relevant and relatable with each chapter. Looking forward to more chapters. Keep up the good work Author. 👌

3yr
TheRabbitHole
TheRabbitHoleLv10

Just to be clear, I like the story. It kept me curious enough to follow it through for now. But there is one major issue: the writing needs a lot of improvement. I felt lost at times when I was reading. Structure needs to be fixed and that calls for improvement in Grammar. Sometimes, the writing is unnecessarily descriptive, and sometimes when it needs those descriptions for better understanding, it's just vague or doesn't exist. As for the dialogue, I get the gist of what they're trying to say, but they need changes to make them seem natural and spoken by actual people. Other than that, the story's nice. There's not much world background other than that they live in a super-powered world of some sort. The first 4 chapters that are out are alright for an introduction and I'm sure they'll be much better when the writing is improved. MC is like an angsty teen but I'm sure there's development for him, especially if it's a weak-to-strong type of story. To say it again, I like the story and will follow it for more. ( •̀ ω •́ )y

3yr
Sumayya_Riaz
Sumayya_RiazLv2

The was very interesting and good! It is a nice novel. But some improvements are needed. Overall good. Keep it up!👍👍 . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

3yr
Eshal_Shahnawaz
Eshal_ShahnawazLv2

The writing makes me feel like I'm there experiencing everything! Awesome writing skills and great character development too! I'll definitely say it's worth a read! Looking forward to more chapters!

3yr
Fritziest
FritziestLv1

I think that this right here would have good progress. The character arc seems to be dark but it just all adds up. There are quite some mistakes but if worked on along the way, this ought to be great.

3yr
Ariel_x
Ariel_xLv3

With the progress so far, this book has proven itself to be one of a kind. It has a beautiful story line that gives one the feeling to continue. I recommend this book to any library. It is going to be awesome. Keep up with the work Author!

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