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Erfan_Sh
Erfan_ShLv13yr
2021-08-06 06:32

Very promising Novel with lots of interesting and engaging plots. The characters keep getting more relevant and relatable with each chapter. Looking forward to more chapters. Keep up the good work Author. 👌

Jacob Mornings

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that's very encouraging 🙁🙁

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listen_moon
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Amazing plot. 4.6 stars cuz of update stability. I do hope that u will improve. Kiddos to the author ......✌✌✌ I know u will improve. All the best.

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This book really deserves 5 star I love the story. The way the writer describes story is kinda amazing. I wanna learn from this style. Kudos to the writer. Best of Luck!!

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The way the story is on a different planet makes it a unique one :) And the hologram gadget is an interesting thing I would say.. looking forward to the further chapters.

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this story is absolutely out of this world. I have read the first few chapters in one blow. i sure hope the author is writing more chapters, as I want to know how things continue.

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TheRabbitHole
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Just to be clear, I like the story. It kept me curious enough to follow it through for now. But there is one major issue: the writing needs a lot of improvement. I felt lost at times when I was reading. Structure needs to be fixed and that calls for improvement in Grammar. Sometimes, the writing is unnecessarily descriptive, and sometimes when it needs those descriptions for better understanding, it's just vague or doesn't exist. As for the dialogue, I get the gist of what they're trying to say, but they need changes to make them seem natural and spoken by actual people. Other than that, the story's nice. There's not much world background other than that they live in a super-powered world of some sort. The first 4 chapters that are out are alright for an introduction and I'm sure they'll be much better when the writing is improved. MC is like an angsty teen but I'm sure there's development for him, especially if it's a weak-to-strong type of story. To say it again, I like the story and will follow it for more. ( •̀ ω •́ )y

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Sumayya_Riaz
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The was very interesting and good! It is a nice novel. But some improvements are needed. Overall good. Keep it up!👍👍 . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

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Eshal_Shahnawaz
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The writing makes me feel like I'm there experiencing everything! Awesome writing skills and great character development too! I'll definitely say it's worth a read! Looking forward to more chapters!

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Fritziest
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I think that this right here would have good progress. The character arc seems to be dark but it just all adds up. There are quite some mistakes but if worked on along the way, this ought to be great.

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Ariel_x
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With the progress so far, this book has proven itself to be one of a kind. It has a beautiful story line that gives one the feeling to continue. I recommend this book to any library. It is going to be awesome. Keep up with the work Author!

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