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2021-06-12 19:23

The granmer is above the average in webnovel. The updates are consistent. You charecter needs a lot of work. The charecter acts like a 13 Year old boy. who’s second chance at life did’t tought him anything. The charecter made referances of Mc systems but doesn’t understand why his system has a quirky personality. World building is big part of the story, so, far the setting of your story remains vague. Please go more in detail to understan The circumstances your charecter is under base on the locations he is. and please read a business book. Your charecter setting is a business, your buSiness Sense sucks, honestly.

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Eternal_DemonAuthor

Ah, thanks for the review. You are actually correct, my business sense really sucks, so can you recommend me a book or two regarding business?

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Eternal_Demon:Ah, thanks for the review. You are actually correct, my business sense really sucks, so can you recommend me a book or two regarding business?
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I wont deny, i enjoyed book.. it is one of the very few system based novels that i like, but unfortunately there are two huge loopholes in the plot in recent chapters. that turned my mood sour. 1. about khrom and rayna: khrom was incredibly guilty after he misjudged his wife and killed he, but suddenly he started new married life, just after a few months.. how does that make sense?? i would have no complaints if his wife was killed by others, then the story makes sense.. but when aythor added that he misjudged his wife, killed her and incredibly guilty for his action, romantic development with rayna doesn't make sense. 2. this one is way more fatal than previous one. both siblings seldom remember their parents. okay, even if i understand that they are worried inside, but dont have the power to do anything, thats why they are just waiting.. thats also good. but suddenly mc went on a business trip, he didnt think that his parents can come back in mean time. okay they were aboyt to come back in some days, so that does not matter. most importantly, after accidentally arriving into anothet empire, why are they settling down. instead of going back.???? why did her sister said nothing when mc proposed to start a shop in the capital?? if author notice my review, i would be grateful if you are kind enough to give me a proper explanation. or please correct these two loopholes, such obvious loopholes hurt my head. anyway, you rock, thank you for writing such an amazing book. please dont make it trash in later stages, or i will cry.. for me this is a master piece

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