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LordInsanity
LordInsanityLv54yr
2021-03-14 09:50

MC has a LOTM system. Former useless fat NEET reincarnated into Danmachi pre-canon. Wears his artifacts (Mask, cloak, shoes) for no fucking reason and enters Hostess of Fertility. Anyone who's read danmachi knows that Freya is Syr, and that she can see souls. So Hurrdurr what do we expect when she's shocked to find souls in all of his artifacts? And why the **** did he even wear them in the first place? Takes Lily as an appetence beyonder for no apparent reason Suddenly acts like BFFs with Ryuu? Constantly makes mistakes like almost slipping up by almost saying his real name while in disguise. For some reason, he engages in combat with overconfidence only to fail like a ******* since he literally has no practice or training of any sort.' What? Are you going to tell me some fatass neet has a fucking blackbelt and 69 years of contract assassin experience? BS. He enters dungeon with no skills other than the shit he gets from drinking potions. I mean seriously you're facing monsters, just use some valis to pay for a tutor from the guild or some shit. Makes a fucking scene for no reason after killing the evilus people. Are you going to say it's for acting? Did the author explain what the thief pathway of acting is? Is it stealing? I don't know? But wooow he says that he the black emperor killed them all, gg. Author doesn't explain MC's thought process, or anything. MC is apparently some sort of veteran in fighting since he could take a whole familia with Ryuu. What gives him the motivation to do that? Shouldn't he just start by acting and gaining strength and not showboating without any thought? The only practice he's done is stealing and killing mobs in the dungeon? Has he fought any person with intelligence? Is he just spamming his skills hoping to kill someone? He used that gun of his and only managed to injure someone, what a big surprise, am I right?

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Liblord13
Liblord13Author

thanks for the review.

KyuuSushi
KyuuSushiLv4

Quite accurate review. I was surprised when for literally no reason mc is like giving lily the Beyonce ability. I know mc liked her character and all but literally giving her this ability doesn't makes sense. I also hope he levels up a bit instead of acting extremely selfless to the point he may die.

InHisName
InHisNameLv6

If it wasn't for people like you, the review system would be completely pointless on Webnovel. Thanks for keeping the world sane.

greedsniveling
greedsnivelingLv1

hmm indeed you are quite accurate in your sayings I must say well done with this review but do enjoy it so far.

greedsniveling
greedsnivelingLv1

so will there really be a harem because I really hate those then again what can I do to stop u this is indeed your story indeed indeed it is anyway plz answer right away?

Liblord13:thanks for the review.
someRandomMob
someRandomMobLv4

i see, thanks for the dodge comrade.

spectermerlin
spectermerlinLv14

IDK if ya read the story at all mate, first, the MC comes in wearing sealed Artifacts because they will disguise him. So his soul would seem "average." He couldn't have known a Sealed Artifact had a "soul", since it is only a characteristic. LOTM didn't say anything about them having souls. Secondly, if you read LOTM properly this time, to advance he would need the help of another beyonder, for example, the Error pathway needs him to steal the ascencion to godhood to another. So this was a smart move from the MC to plan ahead a ascension, and also to build his organisation. But since he didn't mention this and it was only implied, your ape brain might've missed it. Third, he only messed up his name 1-2 times in the story and it wasnt even vital. Fourth, it was said in the latter chapters that the experience he recieved was being "guided" from one of his sealed artifact, that blade which drinks wine. That's why even though he seemed to fight with beautiful swordsmanship, he was reckless, cowardly, yet brave and also crying. It was mentioned that he was really "contradictive" by Ryuu herself. Fourth, if you read to the end. Ryuu actually only accepted him because of his lies and his selflessness that seemed to be "for her" (it wasnt, and only really to make use of the situation.) She treats him like an enemy/villain after she find out some of his lies. Fifth, read the previous lines about him getting the "experience" filled in his head from the Sealed Artifact. Sixth, the thought process of the MC isn't explained as in the earlier chapters to make the MC seem more "mysterious" and also make hype for him. This same technique is used in LOTM, where Klein's thought process stopped being explained. Though I doubt you could understand that, since you want everything explained to you. To the last thing you said, you again, forgot that he has too ALSO level up and the Dungeon seems to be connected to a sefirah somehow, (conjecture by the MC from the information he has gotten.) Thanks for reading, mate.

justacoffeeaddict
justacoffeeaddictLv3

nice meme

spectermerlin:IDK if ya read the story at all mate, first, the MC comes in wearing sealed Artifacts because they will disguise him. So his soul would seem "average." He couldn't have known a Sealed Artifact had a "soul", since it is only a characteristic. LOTM didn't say anything about them having souls. Secondly, if you read LOTM properly this time, to advance he would need the help of another beyonder, for example, the Error pathway needs him to steal the ascencion to godhood to another. So this was a smart move from the MC to plan ahead a ascension, and also to build his organisation. But since he didn't mention this and it was only implied, your ape brain might've missed it. Third, he only messed up his name 1-2 times in the story and it wasnt even vital. Fourth, it was said in the latter chapters that the experience he recieved was being "guided" from one of his sealed artifact, that blade which drinks wine. That's why even though he seemed to fight with beautiful swordsmanship, he was reckless, cowardly, yet brave and also crying. It was mentioned that he was really "contradictive" by Ryuu herself. Fourth, if you read to the end. Ryuu actually only accepted him because of his lies and his selflessness that seemed to be "for her" (it wasnt, and only really to make use of the situation.) She treats him like an enemy/villain after she find out some of his lies. Fifth, read the previous lines about him getting the "experience" filled in his head from the Sealed Artifact. Sixth, the thought process of the MC isn't explained as in the earlier chapters to make the MC seem more "mysterious" and also make hype for him. This same technique is used in LOTM, where Klein's thought process stopped being explained. Though I doubt you could understand that, since you want everything explained to you. To the last thing you said, you again, forgot that he has too ALSO level up and the Dungeon seems to be connected to a sefirah somehow, (conjecture by the MC from the information he has gotten.) Thanks for reading, mate.
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spectermerlin
spectermerlinLv14

idk if you're so self-centered you don't notice this, but they got updated only recently. that shows how my arguments still stands, since they were made before it updated. Also, quite narcissistic to like your own comment no...

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spectermerlin
spectermerlinLv14

also quite curious, doesn't the "updates" that you're speaking of then completely invalidated all your arguments in the review?

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Spiroo
SpirooLv4

Yeah... no... SpecterMerlin has read this before thr rewrite, when I recommended this Fanfic to her it wasn't rewriten yet

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Phaze_MorningStar2
Phaze_MorningStar2Lv4

Ok I UnderstandI'm in the wrong

Phaze_MorningStar2
Phaze_MorningStar2Lv4

I'm pretty sure you liked your own comment.So don't you dare act like I'm the only narcissistic man in these comments.

spectermerlin:idk if you're so self-centered you don't notice this, but they got updated only recently. that shows how my arguments still stands, since they were made before it updated. Also, quite narcissistic to like your own comment no...
spectermerlin
spectermerlinLv14

Eh, I never said anything against being a narcissist. So don't get all defensive bout it mate

Phaze_MorningStar2:I'm pretty sure you liked your own comment.So don't you dare act like I'm the only narcissistic man in these comments.
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spectermerlin
spectermerlinLv14

i stole it from someone so idk if i can take the credit

justacoffeeaddict:nice meme
Spiroo
SpirooLv4

So you admit being a narcissist?

Phaze_MorningStar2:I'm pretty sure you liked your own comment.So don't you dare act like I'm the only narcissistic man in these comments.
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Spiroo
SpirooLv4

Sorry dude.... gotta backup my friend

Phaze_MorningStar2:I'm pretty sure you liked your own comment.So don't you dare act like I'm the only narcissistic man in these comments.
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spectermerlin
spectermerlinLv14

Spiroo:Sorry dude.... gotta backup my friend
Phaze_MorningStar2
Phaze_MorningStar2Lv4

YeahI'm sure a lot of webnovel reader like their comment like me.

Spiroo:So you admit being a narcissist?
Spiroo
SpirooLv4

yup! I like my comments to!

Phaze_MorningStar2:YeahI'm sure a lot of webnovel reader like their comment like me.
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