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2024-05-26 00:06

An utterly unnecessary rewrite. The author took a one year hiatus in order to organize everything and rewrite. The previous one was already pretty good, the author could've just gradually improved their writing and the quality of the story by releasing chapters regularly. However, they said they wanted some time to rewrite everything because they wanted the whole book to be consistent in its quality. The result? This ridiculous... thing? Honestly, I'm incredibly disappointed since this was one of my favorite fanfics and the previous one certainly managed to tug at my emotional strings, but this one isn't doing it at all. The incorrect use of adjectives and certain verbs isn't helping with the immersion, the characters that were properly fleshed out in the previous writing weren't even fleshed out properly (e.g. Whitebeard vs Borealis), the world-building is worse compared to the previous one, and the story development and pacing is all over the place, it feels like you don't know what they'll do next (not in a good way) and since everthing just happens all of a sudden without a proper build up or suspense, the story ends up feeling lackluster compared to the previous one, a shadow of its former self. To conclude, this is a rewrite that turned out for the worse. WAY WORSE. If you expect this'll be as good as the previous one, just read something else and save your time.

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