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BlaccLotus
BlaccLotusLv124yr
2021-03-21 01:39

The style of writing is pretty good, neat and quite good written. Both leads are well described especially Erin as the female lead and they're really interesting characters. Great dark vibes I might say, author is really good at writing the dark part and the action scene as I found myself immersed on it. Story development has been good so far, the anticipation and guessing keeps me at the edge every time. The story line is also so easy to follow and will trap you with its cliff hangers. The bad: It could be personal. The switching from first person to third person and back is a bit annoying. There are some grammar errors here and there, but nothing that would obstruct the readers from following the story. Good cover and synopsis will bring you more readers, the cover is really good for me personally but the synopsis is not, I don't know on pc version but on mobile app the synopsis is a bit too messy. I mean I think the usage of --------- is so unnecessary. "I love you" doesn't always mean "I will stay" —February 13, 11:59pm. Well that's it. My first read of zombie romance and it's enjoyable reading experience. Good luck to you.

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Thank you so much for this review. I mainly do everything on laptop. I'll fix the things you advise. Greatly appreciated all of this. Also if you're interested, We have a discord server for writers, and I would love to invite you there. If you're interested you could join through this link: https://discord.gg/x8bt2zGf We would be honored to have you there.

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Wow, both a chilling start, and very sad, I am touched. The writing is good quality, and the overall story has a good element of suspense and intrigue that made me want to keep reading on. A few occasional grammatical errors but overall, a really good read! Nice work author!

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Mel_Aniv
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After reading for a while, I observed that the author improved with his writings. It was difficult at first but you will get the hang of it in the future. With few edits and finishing touches, this will improve in terms of quality! I gotta say I'm inpressed with the author's growth! What a nice feeling of your brethren improving!

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It touched me deep.It was very sad😭😭. Very brave of you to write about such a sensitive subject. Well done and keep going. It has potential dont give up.

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Minxs
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Overall was a solid story, I would mention that some words are repeated and the descriptions are a little weak. Also more adjectives could be used in the story to draw the reader into the story more. World background so far is a little incomplete but it could just be that way for the mystery. Looks good overall, keep up the good work :)

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After reading a couple of chapters of this book I consider you say that it has a good overall tone and the author really pays attention to the details and progression of the story. There's still some room for growth but so far from what I've seen it's looking good .

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The story is quite intriguing and the progression is good. Writing quality seems to be getting better by the chapters and I find myself wanting to know more about the events that enfolds. Overall though, I'd advise author to keep up the pace and also edit the previous chapters as you progress

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It is a really good story with interesting characters. While there are a few grammatical errors, the story itself managed to draw me in. Improving your grasp of the language comes with practice, but having a good story and concept aren't that easy. This story has the potential to become a great one. Keep up the good work.

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Really well done novel, with very great ideas and clear goal the author has in his minds. Just convert this great start into something amazing. Good luck!!

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