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2021-02-21 13:18

Overall was a solid story, I would mention that some words are repeated and the descriptions are a little weak. Also more adjectives could be used in the story to draw the reader into the story more. World background so far is a little incomplete but it could just be that way for the mystery. Looks good overall, keep up the good work :)

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