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Midnight_Raven0425Lv103yr
2021-03-03 16:51

I find the first few chapters cute, and interesting, and there are a few flaws such as the use of verb but, still it's a five since all of those can be worked on... All in all, I like the book, expecting it to continue gorgeously πŸ₯³

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