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Mysterious_PenLv44yr
2021-02-14 19:26

Nice writing. U have great imagination author. With constant update, i think this story will be amazing. The story is also very creative. It's very well written. Good job👍😊

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Origin_Saint
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Seeing you here is a relief, I was worried, when I saw all the reviews were by relatively new accounts 😅

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Idczhen
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I have decided to write my second review after having 63 chapters so far and I want to let you know a few things. One, this is my first novel so it's not a surprised for you to see so many flaws in it. Two, I never written a novel chapter format before but I have learned as I continue to write more. Now let's go to the pros and cons of this novel. Pros Stability in update of course is great and the storyline is unique in it's own way as the protagonist does not "follow the book" rules. It has some comedies and light-heart moment in a serious situation. The MC may seem like a simp but he's not because he has no lover like many male out there. Therefore, it's hard to know how to act around a female considering his inexperience. Not much pros as this novel is just the beginning of me writing in an impulse. Cons Let's say the grammars and tense could really make the story a bit confusing but smart readers should understand my meaning. Of course, if you found some wrong use of tense, do let me know so I can fix it and not look like a fool. The POV aka point of view does changes multiple time through out the novel but as I'm writing this review now. I have fully decided to get rid of the first POV to third POV as it's easier and gives me a wider range in story telling. The fight scene are not that great given I don't specialize nor have experience in how to portray one. But I will try my best to improve it and please be lenient for once. Overall, I didn't rate myself highly since most of the category is either a 3 star or 4star except for my stability of updates. I just hope you will give me a chance as a new writer in here. Thank you for reading my really long review. (However, a review should be this long to begin with xD)

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